You and some of your friends want to start a weekly dance club, and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In your letter: - explain the dance project - ask if it is possible to rent the hall and under what terms - state what day and times you would like to use the hall
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
DeleteMy name is Mike Gregory and I am writingwriting this letter to enquire about the possibility of renting your hall to hold weekly meetingsfor the purpose of holding some meetings for our dance club.
We will hold these meetings mainly to discuss a dance project that we want to complete successfullyto successfully complete before the arrival of our National Youth Daynational youth day so that the young artists takingyoung artists, taking part in this dance projectthis dance project, can learn about their individual roles and responsibilities in the project. Again, please do not think that we want to rent your hall to practise dancingactually practice dancing, rather we want it only to discuss how best we can organiseorganize and complete our upcoming dance project. Regarding the scheduleBy the way, we would like to use the hallwe would like to use it only at weekendsduring the weekends from 5:00 pm to 9:00 pm for about six consecutive weeks6 continuous weeks, and the meetings will involvewill be attended by about 15 to 20 people each timepeople, each time.
So, based on the information above, I was just wondering if you could rent us the hall, and should you choose to do so, please specify the terms and conditions upon which we both can agree.
Yours faithfully,
Mike Gregory
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter explains the youth dance project, provides evening hours, duration, and attendance numbers, and politely asks about rental terms. Its strongest feature is the practical detail supporting the hall request. However, the intended use is confusing because a weekly dance club is described as discussion-only, and 'weekends' does not identify the requested day. Prioritise a clear project purpose and specify an exact weekly day and rental schedule.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The project, rental enquiry, terms, time range, duration, and group size are covered, but the purpose is inconsistent and the requested day is unspecified.
State a specific schedule such as every Saturday from 5 to 9 p.m. for six weeks and clarify whether the hall is for rehearsals, planning, or both.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphs frame the request and terms, though the central paragraph is long and repeats the phrase 'dance project'.
Separate the project explanation from the proposed schedule and attendance details, reducing defensive clarification about not practising.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for a formal rental request, but repetition and several wordy expressions reduce precision.
Use 'before National Youth Day', 'rehearsal or planning sessions', 'six consecutive weeks', and 'rental conditions'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures is mostly accurate, with occasional punctuation and clause-linking problems.
Replace the comma splice before 'rather' with two clear clauses and remove unnecessary commas around 'taking part in this project'.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You and some of your friends want to start a weekly dance club, and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In your letter:
- explain the dance project
- ask if it is possible to rent the hall and under what terms
- state what day and times you would like to use the hall
Your response
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