You and some of your friends want to start a weekly dance club, and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In your letter: - explain the dance project - ask if it is possible to rent the hall and under what terms - state what day and times you would like to use the hall
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Khushbu, and I recently came across an advertisement for your hallthe hall owned by you, which is available for rent from next month. I am writing this letter to express my interest in using your hall to schedule meetings for the dance club that I and some of my friends are planning to start for the Dance festival rehearsals for two months. Initially, We will have to hold some meetings to discuss the project we are initiating, known as “Dance Fever”, to teach other dance forms and rehearsals before the arrival of the National Youth Day.
We found the description of your hall to be suitable for our needsapt for our purpose. The location is quite convenient for everyone who will be attending these meetingsattending this meeting. To clarifyAgain, just to clarify, we only want to schedule meetings to discuss our dance project plans and organisationapproach and functionality rather than practisingand not for practising the actual dance. We would like to rent the place to holdhave weekly meetings for the next two months under mutually agreed termsthe stated terms and& agreement.
We would like to use it only at weekendsduring the weekends from 5:00 pm to 9:00 pm for about eight consecutivecontinuous weeks, and about 15 to 20 people will attend the meetings. Based on these detailsSo, based on the information above, I was just wondering if you could rent the hall to usrent us the hall, and should you choose to do so, please specify the rental feerent amount and the terms and conditions that we can both agree onupon which we both can agree.
Looking forward to hearing back from you.
Yours faithfully,
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter has a clear formal purpose, sensible paragraphing, and enough practical detail about attendance, duration, and rental terms. Its main limitation is that the dance project is described inconsistently, while the preferred day remains vague as only weekends is specified; the priority is to state one precise day and explain coherently whether the hall is for meetings, rehearsals, or both.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose and all three bullet points are addressed in an appropriately formal tone, but the project description is inconsistent and the requested day is imprecise.
Specify a particular weekend day and give one coherent account of how the hall will support the dance club.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged in clear paragraphs and progresses logically from the project to suitability and practical rental details, despite some repetition.
Remove repeated clarification about meetings and use shorter topic-focused sentences to make the progression more economical.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range for the topic, but awkward collocations such as schedule meetings, project approach and functionality, and eight continuous weeks reduce precision.
Choose natural rental and club vocabulary, such as hold meetings, organise rehearsals, and eight consecutive weeks.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, although agreement, capitalization, parallelism, and sentence-control errors recur.
Check long sentences for clear subject relationships and parallel forms, especially constructions involving the club's purpose and planned activities.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You and some of your friends want to start a weekly dance club, and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In your letter:
- explain the dance project
- ask if it is possible to rent the hall and under what terms
- state what day and times you would like to use the hall
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