You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter say: - why you need to use this private room - what you need them to provide for the party - inquire about the price of the food you are ordering
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a local resident of Melbourne, writing to inquire about the availability of the private function roomprivate gala at the Rendezvous Hotel Melbournein your Rendezvous Hotel Melbourne on 27th November. We will celebraterejoice in our parents' 50th anniversary, a very special occasion for all of us, and have decided to celebrate the event at your hotel's private function roomhotel's gala. We are expecting approximately 50 guests foron the occasion. The celebration will be held on 27 NovemberThe ceremony is on 27th November and we are planning a dinner party and would like to rent the venue for the evening. Could you provideYou should be in charge of a buffet dinner for the guests, drinks, decorationsdecoration and supervision of the event. We would need a projector and a large screen to share some wonderful memories of our parents at the event. Could you please ensureMake sure there is backup poweran electricity backup. This is a special occasiondistinctive event for us and we want to make it memorableremarkable. Please inform me if the venue is available on that day and how much it would cost to hire it. Could you also specifyAlso, specify the menu and drink items in the buffet and their prices including GST. I would appreciate it if you couldcan share your idea of decoration as well. Yours faithfully, Sarah Pauline
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter covers the occasion, requested facilities, and food-price enquiry with relevant, specific detail, and its overall purpose is immediately clear. The main limitation is uneven formal register: direct commands to the manager sound abrupt, while several word choices for the room and celebration are inaccurate. The highest priority is to recast requests as polite enquiries and use precise hotel-event vocabulary throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All required points are covered with useful detail, but several imperative requests weaken the otherwise appropriate formal tone.
Phrase every request politely, especially the staffing, backup power, menu, pricing, and decoration enquiries.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter moves logically from the anniversary and guest numbers to facilities and costs, but the single paragraph and some repetition limit clear grouping.
Create distinct paragraphs for the booking context, requested arrangements, food and price questions, and closing request.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range for discussing the event and hotel services, though private gala, rejoice in, electricity backup, and remarkable are imprecise choices.
Use accurate expressions such as private function room, celebrate an anniversary, backup power, and make the occasion memorable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most sentences are accurate and varied, with a few awkward coordinated structures and minor modal inconsistency in polite requests.
Break up heavily coordinated sentences and use could rather than can after I would appreciate it if in this formal context.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter say:
- why you need to use this private room
- what you need them to provide for the party
- inquire about the price of the food you are ordering
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