You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Sample Response
Dear Josh, Warm greetings from Nepal. I hope you are doing well. I am really happy to hearknow about your recent promotionyour promotion recently and wish you the very bestwish you very best in your future endeavors. You'll be happy to knowYou would be happy to know that I have been accepted intoto Southernsouthern Illinois University Edwardsville for the Master'sMasters in Marketing Research program. I am excited as well as concerned to take such a big step in my life, especially for the reason of funding. I have very limited funding available from my universityschool - barely enough to cover my living costsbarely enough to stay - and I am thinking of lookingand thinking of looking for a part-time jobpart time job. I can earn for my food and other expenses and spend some during good-times when visiting your place. I was wonderinghoping if you could inquire atin some of the stores nearby for job vacancies when you have timeat your convenience. I would greatly appreciateI will much appreciate your help and can't wait to see you soon. Best wishesWarm Regards, Deeuce
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter maintains a warm, friendly voice and addresses the study plan, financial motivation, and practical request for help with relevant specifics. Development is rather brief and several awkward grammatical and lexical combinations reduce naturalness; the highest priority is to express the funding situation and job request in clearer, fully formed sentences while retaining the effective informal tone.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are covered, and the friendly register remains appropriate throughout.
Develop the job preferences and the type of help requested a little further while trimming the less relevant opening detail.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a sensible sequence from personal news to study plans, financial need, and the request, but the single-block presentation limits structural clarity.
Use separate short paragraphs for the study news, the reason for working, and the requested help.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied enough for the purpose, including precise references to funding, expenses, and vacancies, though several combinations sound unnatural.
Use natural phrases such as earn money for food, enjoy myself when visiting, and I would greatly appreciate your help.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The letter shows some effective complex structures, but omissions and incomplete constructions recur despite meaning remaining clear.
Check articles, auxiliary verbs, and sentence completion, especially in the clauses about limited funding and looking for work.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
- give details of your study plans
- explain why you want to get a part-time job
- suggest how your friend could help you find a job
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