You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Sample Response
Dear John, How are you?. Hope this letter finds you in good health. I have a good news! I am coming to United Kingdom to do my Master’s in Supply Chain Management. I know you will be equally excited as I am, its been long since we last met, I have lot of things to tell you. Coming to the reason behind this letter, I will be doing my Masters in University of Salford, Manchester, the city you are staying. It will be a 1 year course with 3 classes per week and as per my student visa, I can also work part time for 20 hours per week. As you are living there for more than 5 years now, I am well aware you will be having a lot of contacts there, who can help me to secure a part time job. I also remember you telling me, you worked in KFC as a team member for over a year, so you must be having some friends still working there, who can assist me in fetching a job. Nevertheless, I am looking forward to meet in you in person. Sincerely, Nadeem
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove extra full stop Original: ?. Suggested revision: ? Why it matters: A question mark should not be followed by a full stop.
- 2. Add the subject Original: Hope this letter Suggested revision: I hope this letter Why it matters: The clause needs an explicit subject in this written context.
- 3. Use uncountable news Original: a good news Suggested revision: good news Why it matters: News is uncountable and cannot take the article a.
- 4. Add the article Original: to United Kingdom Suggested revision: to the United Kingdom Why it matters: The country name requires the definite article.
- 5. Fix comparison form Original: equally Suggested revision: as Why it matters: An equality comparison requires the as ... as structure.
- 6. Fix the contraction Original: its been Suggested revision: it has been Why it matters: The phrase needs the verb has rather than the possessive form its.
- 7. Add the article Original: I have lot of things Suggested revision: I have a lot of things Why it matters: The quantifier is formed with a lot of.
- 8. Use a direct transition Original: Coming to the reason behind this letter Suggested revision: To explain my study plans Why it matters: The revision introduces the study details more directly and naturally.
- 9. Fix degree form Original: my Masters Suggested revision: my master's degree Why it matters: The degree name needs the possessive form and a clear head noun.
- 10. Fix university phrase Original: in University of Salford Suggested revision: at the University of Salford Why it matters: Study takes at before an institution, whose full name also requires the.
- 11. Fix relative clause Original: Manchester, the city you are staying Suggested revision: Manchester, the city where you live Why it matters: Where you live correctly describes the friend's location.
- 12. Hyphenate compound modifier Original: a 1 year course Suggested revision: a one-year course Why it matters: A compound age or duration modifier before a noun requires hyphens.
Suggested Rewrites
- ?. ?
- Hope this letter I hope this letter
- a good news good news
- to United Kingdom to the United Kingdom
- equally as
- its been it has been
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is strongest when giving specific study details and suggesting practical ways the friend’s contacts could help secure work. Its major limitation is that it never explains why a part-time job is wanted, leaving one required purpose unfulfilled, while frequent grammatical slips reduce polish. The highest priority is to add a clear personal reason for working and then proofread sentence boundaries, articles, and prepositions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The study plans and proposed help are developed with useful detail, but the required reason for wanting a part-time job is missing.
Explain a specific motivation for working, such as covering living costs or gaining local experience, and link it naturally to the request for help.
Coherence and Cohesion
The message follows a broadly logical sequence, but the single-block presentation and several long, loosely connected sentences weaken organisation.
Use short paragraphs for the greeting, study plans, reason for working, requested help, and closing, with clearer sentence boundaries.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for study and employment topics, with some useful specificity, though several collocations and word forms are unnatural.
Replace phrases such as fetching a job and the city you are staying with natural expressions such as finding a job and the city where you live.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts varied sentence structures, but frequent errors with articles, verb forms, prepositions, possessives, and comma splices reduce accuracy.
Prioritise correcting forms such as some good news, it’s been, look forward to meeting you, and properly separated independent clauses.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
- give details of your study plans
- explain why you want to get a part-time job
- suggest how your friend could help you find a job
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