You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Sample Response
Dear John, How are you??. I hope this letterHope this letter finds you in good health. I have good newsa good news! I am coming to the United Kingdomto United Kingdom to do my Master’s in Supply Chain Management. I know you will be asequally excited as I am, it has beenits been long since we last met, I have a lot of thingsI have lot of things to tell you. To explain my study plansComing to the reason behind this letter, I will be doing my master's degreemy Masters at the University of Salfordin University of Salford, Manchester, the city where you liveManchester, the city you are staying. It will be a one-year coursea 1 year course with 3 classes per week and under the terms of my student visaas per my student visa, I can also work part-timework part time for 20 hours per week. As you have lived there for more than five yearsAs you are living there for more than 5 years now, I am well aware you will be having a lot of contacts there, who can help me to secure a part time job. I also remember you telling me, you worked in KFC as a team member for over a year, so you must havemust be having some friends still working there, who can help me find a jobassist me in fetching a job. Nevertheless, I am looking forward to meeting you in personlooking forward to meet in you in person. Sincerely, Nadeem
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is strongest when giving specific study details and suggesting practical ways the friend’s contacts could help secure work. Its major limitation is that it never explains why a part-time job is wanted, leaving one required purpose unfulfilled, while frequent grammatical slips reduce polish. The highest priority is to add a clear personal reason for working and then proofread sentence boundaries, articles, and prepositions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The study plans and proposed help are developed with useful detail, but the required reason for wanting a part-time job is missing.
Explain a specific motivation for working, such as covering living costs or gaining local experience, and link it naturally to the request for help.
Coherence and Cohesion
The message follows a broadly logical sequence, but the single-block presentation and several long, loosely connected sentences weaken organisation.
Use short paragraphs for the greeting, study plans, reason for working, requested help, and closing, with clearer sentence boundaries.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for study and employment topics, with some useful specificity, though several collocations and word forms are unnatural.
Replace phrases such as fetching a job and the city you are staying with natural expressions such as finding a job and the city where you live.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts varied sentence structures, but frequent errors with articles, verb forms, prepositions, possessives, and comma splices reduce accuracy.
Prioritise correcting forms such as some good news, it’s been, look forward to meeting you, and properly separated independent clauses.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
- give details of your study plans
- explain why you want to get a part-time job
- suggest how your friend could help you find a job
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