You are looking for a full-time job, and recently you saw a job opening in an advertisement. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like to do and say what experience and skills you have
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter regarding the job opening that you have advertised in a newspaper last week. I would like to apply for the post and I am hoping you would consider me a deserving candidate for the job and let me discuss my suitability for the post in a formal interview. I am looking forward to getting a job that would enable me to work on and manage software projects that are developed in Java and Oracle databases. I want to work as a project manager and expect opportunities for my career growth. I have completed my graduation in Computer Science and Engineering. Besides, I have 5 years of experience in the software development field and my expertise is in Java programming. Moreover, I have in-depth knowledge of the Oracle Database system. The reason to apply for this job is that I want to work with a software development company that has clients from various parts of the world and offers a great working environment, remuneration and carer growth opportunity. The job responsibilities perfectly suit my experience and skills. I have attached my curriculum vitae with this letter for your kind consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Namrata Roy
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Past time tense Original: that you have advertised in a newspaper last week Suggested revision: that you advertised in a newspaper last week Why it matters: Use past simple with the finished time expression “last week”.
- 2. Modal choice Original: I am hoping you would consider Suggested revision: I hope you will consider Why it matters: This is the more natural form for a formal request.
- 3. Professional phrasing Original: a deserving candidate Suggested revision: a suitable candidate Why it matters: “Suitable candidate” is the standard application phrase.
- 4. Interview request Original: let me discuss my suitability Suggested revision: invite me to discuss my suitability Why it matters: This is more natural and polite in a job application.
- 5. Current aim Original: looking forward to getting a job Suggested revision: looking for a job Why it matters: “Looking forward to” suggests anticipation of something already arranged.
- 6. Role phrase Original: work on and manage software projects Suggested revision: manage software projects Why it matters: The shorter phrase is clearer for a project-manager application.
- 7. Natural career phrase Original: expect opportunities for my career growth Suggested revision: seek opportunities for career growth Why it matters: “Seek opportunities” is a more natural collocation.
- 8. Degree phrase Original: I have completed my graduation Suggested revision: I have a degree Why it matters: In English, you usually say you have a degree, not that you completed your graduation.
- 9. Formal number Original: 5 years of experience Suggested revision: five years of experience Why it matters: In formal writing, small numbers are often written as words.
- 10. Concise skills Original: my expertise is in Java programming Suggested revision: I specialise in Java programming Why it matters: This is a more direct way to express the skill.
- 11. Natural motivation Original: The reason to apply for this job is that Suggested revision: I am applying for this role because Why it matters: This is more concise and idiomatic.
- 12. Spelling error Original: carer growth opportunity Suggested revision: career growth opportunities Why it matters: “Carer” is a different word; the intended word is “career”.
Suggested Rewrites
- that you have advertised in a newspaper last week that you advertised in a newspaper last week
- I am hoping you would consider I hope you will consider
- a deserving candidate a suitable candidate
- let me discuss my suitability invite me to discuss my suitability
- looking forward to getting a job looking for a job
- work on and manage software projects manage software projects
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Achievement
The application introduces the purpose, states the desired project-manager role, and gives relevant software experience and skills. It is persuasive and complete, though the self-introduction could include the applicant’s current role or background earlier.
Add one concise sentence after the opening that identifies your current professional profile before describing the role you want.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a logical order from application purpose to target role, experience, motivation, and closing. It is a single paragraph, so formal organisation is weaker than the content.
Use clear application-letter paragraphs: opening, desired role, qualifications and experience, reason for applying, and closing.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is appropriate for a job application, with useful terms such as “software projects”, “Oracle databases”, and “curriculum vitae”. Some phrases are repetitive or inaccurate, including “carer growth opportunity” and “deserving candidate”.
Use precise employment collocations and avoid repeating “job” and “career growth”.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is generally accurate and meaning is clear. Minor errors appear in tense after “last week”, modal choice, and article/preposition use.
Check tense with past time expressions and tighten long sentences that contain several requests or reasons.