There is a problem with the changing room in your gym. You reported it several times, but it was not resolved. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter: - Describe the problem. what the gym’s response was - when you reported the problem? - Say what you would like the manager to do about the problem.
Sample Response
Dear Manager,
I am Geetha, a member of the Fitness Gym for 2 years. I am writing this letter to address an issue in the Ladies changing room for the past month.
Firstly, the issue is that the latch of the door is under repair, it is very difficult for the ladies who use the room. In order to change, two ladies are needed, where one needs to hold the door from the front side and the other one will use the room and vise- versa. Due to this, it prolongs to consume time.
Secondly, the floors are untidy, due to this most ladies feel uncomfortable to practice during their session. We have already made a complaint to the gym coordinator regarding this issue last month, they informed us that they will take necessary action. But until now, there is no progress. Due to this, most ladies feel it’s very difficult for them to come to the gym and some are planning to quit from their membership.
Therefore, we are requesting you to take immediate action on this matter at the earnest. So, we will try to continue our membership as we have planned earlier.
Yours Faithfully
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add possessive apostrophe Original: Ladies changing room Suggested revision: ladies' changing room Why it matters: The possessive form is needed because the changing room is for ladies.
- 2. Clarify the fault Original: under repair Suggested revision: broken Why it matters: Under repair suggests that work is already being done, which conflicts with the unresolved problem.
- 3. Use natural passive Original: ladies Suggested revision: people Why it matters: People is the more natural noun when describing who must perform this practical task.
- 4. Fix relative structure Original: where one Suggested revision: one of whom Why it matters: One of whom correctly links the person to the preceding group.
- 5. Use precise location Original: front side Suggested revision: outside Why it matters: Outside clearly describes where the person must stand to hold the door.
- 6. Remove needless wording Original: the other one Suggested revision: the other Why it matters: The other is the concise standard form when referring to the second person.
- 7. Express practical ability Original: will Suggested revision: can Why it matters: Can use expresses the possibility created when someone holds the door.
- 8. Correct fixed phrase Original: vise- versa Suggested revision: vice versa Why it matters: Vice versa is the correct spelling and form of this expression.
- 9. Use natural collocation Original: feel uncomfortable to practice Suggested revision: feel uncomfortable exercising Why it matters: Exercising is the natural complement after feel uncomfortable in this context.
- 10. Match plural reference Original: session Suggested revision: sessions Why it matters: The plural sessions agrees with the reference to multiple gym users.
- 11. Join clauses correctly Original: last month, Suggested revision: last month, and Why it matters: A coordinating conjunction is needed to join the two independent clauses correctly.
- 12. Use reported tense Original: will Suggested revision: would Why it matters: Would is appropriate when reporting a promise made in the past.
Suggested Rewrites
- Ladies changing room ladies' changing room
- under repair broken
- ladies people
- where one one of whom
- front side outside
- the other one the other
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter has a clear purpose, a generally suitable formal tone, and enough concrete detail to make the changing-room problems and their consequences understandable. Its main limitation is imprecise language and sentence construction, which repeatedly makes otherwise relevant points sound awkward, while the requested remedy remains vague. Prioritise stating the specific repairs and cleaning action required, then revise recurring collocation, agreement, and comma-splice errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all required areas are addressed, though the requested action is vague and the history mentions only one complaint rather than the several reports in the situation.
Specify that the manager should repair the latch, arrange regular floor cleaning, and confirm when these actions will be completed.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a clear problem-response-request sequence, but repetitive connectors and several overloaded sentences make cohesion mechanical.
Use fewer repeated linking phrases and separate each cause, consequence, and request into cleanly controlled sentences.
Lexical Resource
The letter has enough vocabulary to describe the situation, but frequent inaccurate collocations such as 'prolongs to consume time' and 'quit from their membership' reduce precision.
Replace awkward combinations with natural phrases such as 'takes extra time,' 'exercise comfortably,' and 'cancel their memberships.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but comma splices, agreement errors, and faulty clause construction recur throughout the letter.
Prioritise complete sentence boundaries and check subject-verb and pronoun agreement before adding more complex clauses.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
There is a problem with the changing room in your gym. You reported it several times, but it was not resolved. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter:
- Describe the problem. what the gym’s response was
- when you reported the problem?
- Say what you would like the manager to do about the problem.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.