You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter: - explain why you think you would be suitable for the job - say what else you could do for the family - give your reasons for wanting the job
This response is estimated at Band 8.5. Can you write a better one?
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Sample Response
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Thompson,
I recently came across your advertisement seeking a tutor to teach your two children my native language, Spanishmy native language - Spanish, and I would likelove to apply for the position.
As a qualified Spanish teacherSpanish language teacher with five years of experience, I have taught children of various ages and proficiency levels. I use interactive, engaging lessonsfocus on interactive and engaging lessons that make learning enjoyable, incorporating games, storytelling, and cultural activities to keep young learners motivated. My approach ensures that your children not only learn Spanishchildren not only learn the language but also develop confidence in using it in daily conversations.
In addition to teaching, I would be happy to assist your family in other ways. I can help with homework, organise educational activities, or even introduce your children to traditional songs and stories from my culture. If needed, I would also be willingIf needed, I am also willing to assist with light household tasks or meal preparation.
I am particularly interested in this role because I have always wanted to experience life in Australia while sharing my language and culture with others. I believe this opportunity would be mutually enriching, and I am eager to contribute to your children's Spanish learningchildren’s learning journey.
Please let me know if you would like to discuss this further. I would be happy to arrange a call at your convenience.
Yours sincerely,
Lucía Gómez
Why this response received Band 8.5
The letter fully satisfies the application task, with convincing qualifications, useful additional help, clear motivation, and an appropriately professional yet warm tone. Its organisation and language are highly controlled; the main limitations are minor stylistic points, including the spaced hyphen before 'Spanish' and a few slightly generic phrases. The best refinement is to make the motivation even more specific to the one-year role while tightening those small punctuation and wording choices.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is immediately clear, all three bullet points are fully developed, and the professional tone is consistently appropriate for prospective employers.
Confirm explicit availability for the full year to make the application completely aligned with the advertised commitment.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph has a distinct communicative function, and ideas progress naturally through qualifications, additional help, motivation, and follow-up.
Tighten the final two paragraphs slightly so the motivation and call to action form an even more concise close.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is flexible, precise, and natural, with strong role-specific phrases such as 'proficiency levels', 'cultural activities', and 'mutually enriching'.
Replace the few generic expressions such as 'assist your family in other ways' with equally concise but more specific wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used accurately and naturally, with only negligible punctuation and stylistic lapses.
Use a colon or commas rather than a spaced hyphen before 'Spanish' and retain the same high level of control elsewhere.