You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter: - explain why you think you would be suitable for the job - say what else you could do for the family - give your reasons for wanting the job
Sample Response
Dear Mr and Mrs Henry, I recently came acrossRecently, I came across an advertisement in whichan advertisement, in which you askedyou have asked for a Spanish speakersomeone from Spain to teach Spanishthe Spanish language to your two children. I have decided to apply for the positionapply for it because the opportunity would help me cover the costs of runningmeet the cost of running an orphanage in a remote village of athe war-torn country in Latin America while allowing me to explorewhile also exploring the beautiful continent of Australia Deleteat the same time. Regarding my suitability for this roleIn my defence of availing this opportunity, I would like to say that I have a bubbly, easy-going personality thata bubbly and easy-going personality which makes it easy for me to build rapport with childrenrather easy for me to relate to the children. Besides, I have also done babysitting jobs to help a few relatives of mine to take care of their children and received some formal training on first-hand experience in childcare. I have also completedfinished a diploma in teaching young children because I am passionate about teaching them. In addition to taking care of your children, I could also prepare some delicious Spanish food and delicacies on some special occasions to surprise your friends and families. I am hoping that you would offer me the job. Thank you in advance. Yours sincerely, Maria Lucy
Why this response received Band 7.0
The application addresses every requested point and presents relevant childcare experience, teaching qualifications, additional help, and clear motivation in a suitably polite tone. Its main weakness is that several ideas are expressed through awkward or imprecise combinations, which makes the application less natural and persuasive. The priority is to state the teaching suitability more directly and revise strained wording for clarity and professionalism.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all three bullet points are covered with relevant supporting information in a suitable register.
Connect the diploma and childcare experience more explicitly to how the applicant would teach Spanish effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a logical application-letter sequence, although some long sentences and formulaic transitions make progression less smooth.
Organise the suitability, extra duties, and motivation into separate paragraphs with more direct transitions.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and generally appropriate, but several combinations, including "in my defence of availing this opportunity," are unnatural.
Prefer precise, idiomatic application language and remove inflated expressions that obscure the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good range of complex structures with generally clear meaning, despite several awkward constructions and minor agreement issues.
Simplify overloaded sentences and check prepositions, reference, and number in phrases such as "friends and families."
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter:
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
Your response
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