You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation in your office about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: - describe what type of presentation you have in mind - what topics it would cover and how long it would take - who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted
Sample Response
Dear Mr Martin, I am writing this letter to ask for permission to giveyour kind permission in order to make a presentation in our office for the purpose of sharing some important information. DeleteIt is worth mentioning that I gained this informationlearned about the information by attending a conference a few days ago ona conference a few days ago that talked about "strategies to meet project deadlines" in detailin a very eloquent and elaborated manner. The conferenceAnyway, the conference lasted almost three hourshad continued for almost three hours and manysince a good number of experienced professionalsexperts and experienced professionals attended it and exchanged their viewstheir views and opinions on this very important issue. In my presentationBut, as far as I am concerned, in my presentation, I would mostly cover the subject of planning effectively to meet the deadlines and how important it is for us to finish our projects onin time. In other words, my presentation would mostly deal with the strategies we can usethe issues we can address to complete our projects in time. Regarding the venueBy the way, I would like to conduct this presentation in our meeting room, and any interested colleague may attendanybody can attend this if they feel interested. I hope you will permit meHope you will permit me to conduct the presentation which deals with an important issue. Yours sincerely, Rudy Robinson
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter has a clear request, a suitable topic, a proposed venue, and a generally respectful tone, with relevant explanation of how deadline planning could help colleagues. Its main limitation is task coverage: it gives the three-hour conference duration instead of stating how long the proposed presentation would take, and the intended audience remains vague. Prioritise specifying a presentation length, a defined participant group, and a practical format.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose, topic, venue, and broad audience are covered, but the presentation type is vague and its required duration is missing.
Propose a specific format and length, such as a 30-minute slide presentation for project managers and team members in the meeting room.
Coherence and Cohesion
The request develops in a generally logical order, but one long paragraph, repetition about deadlines, and loosely used linkers weaken progression.
Use short paragraphs for the request, presentation content and duration, and participants and venue, removing repeated explanations.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for the workplace context, but several expressions are wordy, repetitive, or unnatural.
Replace 'eloquent and elaborated manner' and repeated 'important issue' with concise phrases such as 'practical strategies' and 'meeting project deadlines'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is attempted, but tense choices, punctuation, article use, and some clause constructions are not consistently accurate.
Use direct forms such as 'The conference lasted three hours', 'Anyone interested may attend', and 'I hope you will approve my request'.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation in your office about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter:
- describe what type of presentation you have in mind
- what topics it would cover and how long it would take
- who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted
Your response
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