Write a letter to a friend who works in a foreign country about your interest in seeking employment in a different country. In your letter: - explain why you want to work in a different country - say what type of work you will be looking for - ask questions about working in a different country that your friend may be able to answer
Sample Response
Dear Sindhu, Hope this letter finds you and your family in good health. I am sorry for not writing to you for a long time, butfor a long but I guess you can understand how hectic my schedule has beenrealise my hectic schedule for the past couple of weeks since I wrote about it in my previous letter. I have decided to work in Australia and expecting your opinion regarding this. Now, a sigh of relief! My project workworks are complete and I am looking for a new opportunity to work abroad. You know me well - I have always wanted to improve my life through positive changesmake life enjoyable by making positive changes and I have recently decided to work and live in a multiculturalmulti-cultural environment. I think it would be fascinating to socialise with people of different origins while also enhancing my career and livingwhile I can further enhance my career and live in a better environment. Thus I am looking forward to getting a job in biomedical engineeringBiomedical Engineering, as I have done previouslyas I always did, in Australia as a permanent employee either in a manufacturing or service companya manufacturing or a service-related company. So, I need some information from you since you have already been to different countries and now in Australia in the same industry. Is it mandatory for me to get a work permit or can I move to Australia on a temporary work visamigrate with a temporary work visa and later find a job? Should I take any tests such astake any exams like IELTS or TOEFL? If so, whatIf so what would be the score requirement? And finally, can I apply for jobs before movingsome jobs before moving to Australia? Looking forward to hearing from you about these questionshearing your response in this regard. I hope we can talk soonWe will find some time soon. Convey my regards to your family. Warm wishes, Nivetha
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter responds thoroughly to all three points, giving clear personal and professional reasons, identifying a precise employment field, and asking several useful questions in a friendly tone. Its main weakness is language control: awkward collocations and incomplete grammatical patterns occasionally make otherwise strong ideas sound unnatural. Prioritise concise paragraphing by purpose and revise faulty constructions, particularly the sentence about deciding to work in Australia and expecting advice.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are fully developed with relevant reasons, a specific Biomedical Engineering preference, and practical questions about visas, tests, and applications.
Trim the extended social opening and closing so the employment purpose remains the letter's clearest focus.
Coherence and Cohesion
The content follows a logical sequence from motivation to job preferences and questions, but the lack of paragraph breaks makes the long letter less easy to navigate.
Give each task point its own paragraph and keep the questions together in a final body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and appropriate to employment and migration, though phrases such as 'project works', 'realise my hectic schedule', and 'hear your response' are unnatural.
Replace awkward combinations with idiomatic forms such as 'project work', 'understand how busy I have been', and 'hear from you'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is attempted successfully, but several faulty patterns remain, including 'I have decided to work in Australia and expecting your opinion'.
Maintain parallel verb forms and check for omitted auxiliaries, writing 'I have decided ... and would appreciate your opinion' and 'you are now in Australia'.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
Write a letter to a friend who works in a foreign country about your interest in seeking employment in a different country. In your letter:
- explain why you want to work in a different country
- say what type of work you will be looking for
- ask questions about working in a different country that your friend may be able to answer
Your response
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