Write a letter to a friend who works in a foreign country about your interest in seeking employment in a different country. In your letter: - explain why you want to work in a different country - say what type of work you will be looking for - ask questions about working in a different country that your friend may be able to answer

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Sample Response

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Dear Rahul, Hope all is fine and you are enjoying your vacation. I am writing to seek your advice abouton working in Singapore and need your help and guidance withregarding this. I am hoping that you can share your opinion with me. The foremost reason for choosing Singapore to work in is that the country invites skilled employees from all around the world. The experience and expertise I have gainedachieved over the past five years can be used effectivelyjudiciously and prudently utilised to get a permanent job in a company in Singapore. Moreover, the remuneration and facilities in the IT sector in Singapore areis unmatched, according to my findings. This, however, does not mean that I will easily secure a jobwill be opt-in for a job easily and I understand that migrating to a new country has its demerits. I plan to apply for opportunities that would be limited to the subjects over which I possess core competency, which includes "Programming" and "Artificial Intelligence". It is in this respect that I need your guidance. I would be thankful if you could advise meif you can guide me on the accepted workplace culturework culture that is followed and is acceptable in Singapore. Apart from this, I also want to know the attitude of the locals towards the foreign nationals who work in such companies as their counterparts. Since you have spent a considerable amount of time working there, it would be quite convenient for you to compare the basic requirements, expectations and behavioural changes that one undergoes during the transitional phase. I would be thankful if you could help me by sharing your valuable experience in this regard. Warm wishes, Neeraj

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three content requirements with specific reasons for choosing Singapore, a clear IT focus and several relevant questions for the friend. Its main limitation is an excessively formal, sometimes awkward register for a personal letter, with a few grammatical lapses and repeated requests for guidance. The highest priority is to use more natural language between friends while keeping the detailed questions concise and clearly grouped.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

All bullet points are developed with relevant detail, but the markedly formal register is not consistently suitable for writing to a friend.

Next step

Retain the specific reasons and questions while expressing them in a warmer, more conversational tone appropriate to Rahul.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

The letter progresses logically from reasons to job interests and questions, although repeated requests for guidance add some redundancy.

Next step

Group the work-culture and local-attitude questions together and remove duplicated statements of gratitude and purpose.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A wide vocabulary communicates detailed ideas, but choices such as "judiciously and prudently", "opt-in for a job" and "demerits" sound strained.

Next step

Choose natural personal-letter expressions such as "put my experience to good use", "find a job" and "challenges".

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

Complex structures are generally controlled, with occasional agreement and verb-form errors that do not obscure meaning.

Next step

Check forms such as "facilities are unmatched", "I will be able to find" and "competencies include" during proofreading.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

Write a letter to a friend who works in a foreign country about your interest in seeking employment in a different country. In your letter:

- explain why you want to work in a different country

- say what type of work you will be looking for

- ask questions about working in a different country that your friend may be able to answer

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