You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter: - introduce yourself - say why are you interested in this sports club - ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Derek Galvin, and I am writing to express my interest in joining your Deleteesteemed sports club, SportHub and Fitness Centre. I have recently moved to the neighbourhood and am eager to joinbecome a part of the local sports community. I am hoping that you would kindly answer a few of my questionsa couple of my answers and help me join the clubjoin there.
I am particularly drawn to your sports club because of its reputation for providing high-quality facilities and a welcoming atmosphere. As someone who values physical fitness and enjoys participating in a range of sportsvarious sports activities, I believe that joining your club would not only help me stay active but also allow me to meet like-minded individuals in the community. I have also heard that several employeesa good number of employees from our company already are members of your clubhave your membership.
Before applying for membershipBefore I proceed with my membership application, I would appreciate it if you could provide me with some additional information about the club. Firstly, I would like to inquire about the range of facilities available, including any sports equipment, training areas, and locker rooms. Secondly, could you please outline the membership options and associated costs? Lastly, could you also let me know whetherI am curious to know if the club offers any group classes or personalized training sessions.
Thank you for your timeconsidering my inquiries, and I look forward to your response.
Yours faithfully,
Derek Galvin
Why this response received Band 8.0
The letter is comprehensive, well organised, and consistently formal, with a clear introduction, convincing reasons for joining, and a focused set of membership questions. Its main limitation is a small cluster of unnatural expressions that stand out against otherwise precise and fluent language. The highest priority is to refine these collocations so that every request sounds idiomatic and professionally polished.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter fully introduces the writer, explains the interest in the club, and asks developed questions about facilities, membership costs, classes, and training.
Add one concrete personal detail, such as a preferred sport or training goal, to make the reason for joining even more specific.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing separates the introduction, motivation, and enquiries, while cohesive devices guide the reader smoothly through the detailed questions.
Maintain this strong structure while reducing reliance on enumerative transitions when the logical relationship is already clear.
Lexical Resource
A broad and precise formal vocabulary is used flexibly, although answer a couple of my answers, join there, and have your membership are unnatural collocations.
Replace the awkward phrases with answer a couple of my questions, join the club, and are already members.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, and the few awkward constructions do not impede communication.
Refine the isolated complement and possession patterns so the strongest complex sentences are matched by fully natural phrasing throughout.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- say why are you interested in this sports club
- ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.
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