You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter: - introduce yourself - say why are you interested in this sports club - ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Carl Puran, and I have recently moved to the neighbourhood of Old Spandau. I am writingwriting this letter to request informationget some information about your sports centre.
I have been either a member of a sports club or gym wherever I have lived because you can say, I am very health conscious. So, after moving tointo this new neighbourhood, naturally, I felt the need to join a sports club or gym and thengym; and then found out about your sports club which is located close to my homelocated very near where I live. Apart from this convenient locationdistance, I would like to also join your clubjoin your club also because the majority of the its membersmembers of this club are aroundof my age, or at least thator at least, that is what I have heard. So it would be easier for me to relate to them or befriend a few of them. Most importantlyBut, most importantly, your sports club remains open at weekendsduring the weekends also when I usually have more time to participate in the club’s activitiesenjoy the club activities.
Before I joinBut, before I join your club, I have a couple of questions. Does the club have any children’s playground since I would bring my child with me also, sometimes? And, how much is the cost of membership?
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Carl Puran
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter has a clear purpose, introduces the writer effectively, gives several well-developed reasons for choosing the club, and asks relevant questions about facilities and membership cost. Its main limitation is some conversational repetition and awkward word order in an otherwise appropriate formal enquiry; the highest-priority improvement is to condense the long motivation paragraph and formulate the final questions in more polished business-letter language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are fully addressed with relevant personal context, detailed reasons for interest, and clear questions about a children's facility and membership cost.
Add one concise question about membership terms or available activities to make the information request even more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is clearly paragraphised and progresses from introduction through motivation to questions, though the middle paragraph is somewhat long and repetitive.
Condense the reasons for joining into two focused points: convenient access and suitability of the club's community and opening hours.
Lexical Resource
A good range of vocabulary conveys motivation and social considerations, but expressions such as "you can say" and repeated uses of "also" are less natural.
Use more precise formal wording, for example "I have always been health-conscious" and "The weekend opening hours are particularly convenient."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are generally controlled and meaning is consistently clear, with occasional problems in parallel structure, punctuation, and adverb placement.
Revise forms such as "a member of either a sports club or a gym" and place "also" before the main verb where appropriate.
Write this task while it is fresh
Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.
IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- say why are you interested in this sports club
- ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.