Your company recently introduced a new staff uniform, but staff members are unhappy with it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - explain why you think staff are unhappy with the uniform - describe what you want the new uniform to be like - give suggestions for handling the situation

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam,

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I am writingwriting this letter to inform you that many of our staff members are dissatisfiednot exactly happy with the announcement of a new uniform. I also believeAnd I believe that our seniorhigher management should take stepstake some initiatives to make the uniform more acceptable to everyonemake it more acceptable to all.

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I think most employees in our company are dissatisfied with this new uniformthis new dress code because they do not like the colour combination of the proposed uniformdresses. They have also expressed their concerns in private about wearing such a uniformsuch dresses on hot summer dayson a hot summer day, especially since we often have power cuts during the summer.

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I think management’s proposed colourthe colour that the management has proposed for the new uniform should be revised as it resembles the uniformmimics the dress code of healthcare workershealthcare service providers while most of our employees are technicians. The new uniform should also give our employees the freedom to choose the type of fabrics rather than imposing a single one on them.

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PerhapsPerhaps, the company should ask a few employees to talk to them and listen to their opinions. Please also announce to offer the making cost of the new uniform to make it a success.

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I hope you willwould find my suggestions helpful.

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Yours faithfully,

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Elizabeth Gomez

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter fully explains staff concerns about colour and heat, proposes a more appropriate colour and flexible fabric choices, and suggests consultation and financial support. Its strongest feature is the practical link between the uniform design, technicians' work, summer conditions, and staff acceptance. The main limitation is awkward phrasing in the recommendations; prioritise clear, actionable proposals such as a staff survey, breathable fabric options, and a company clothing allowance.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

All three bullet points are fully developed with plausible reasons, concrete design preferences, and relevant ways to involve and support staff.

Next step

Specify a suitable colour and propose a short trial or staff vote before the company finalises and funds the uniform.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

Clear paragraphs organise the problem, desired changes, proposed handling, and courteous close in a logical sequence.

Next step

Combine the two opening sentences and make the final recommendation paragraph more direct, with one sentence for consultation and one for costs.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is adequate for workplace feedback, though several expressions involving clothing, management, and costs are unnatural.

Next step

Use 'senior management', 'uniforms', 'breathable fabrics', 'manufacturing cost', and 'uniform allowance'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

Complex ideas are generally clear, but sentence fragments, pronoun reference, verb patterns, and request structures contain noticeable errors.

Next step

Use forms such as 'Management should consult a representative group of employees' and 'The company should cover the cost of making the uniforms'.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

Your company recently introduced a new staff uniform, but staff members are unhappy with it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

- explain why you think staff are unhappy with the uniform

- describe what you want the new uniform to be like

- give suggestions for handling the situation

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