You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. Write a letter to the university council officer. In your letter: - describe your apartment and the facilities available - mention why you want to rent out the room - say what kind of tenant you would prefer
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Nathan AdamI am Nathan Adam, a mathematics major at Aura Vincent University. I want to rent out a spare room in my apartment and need your help with this matterhelp regarding this. I want to rent out a room on Central Library Roadat the Central Library Road, Okalum Berry, AV -14. The apartment is on the seventh7th floor and has a lift, Wi-Fi connectionWi-Fi internet connection, hot waterwater heater facilities and an electric cooker. The room is fully furnished and has an attached bathroom. I have a tenancytenant agreement with the landlordflat owner, and I have to pay $200200 dollars per week. The apartment has three rooms and one room is vacantcompletely vacant. I have decided to sublease the room to a tenant who would share the rentsomeone who would share the rent. Moreover, a student from my university would be a good companion for me. The prospective tenantThe student who is interested in occupying the room should be a science major. He or she should moveget in for at least six months and pay two months' rent in advancetwo months' advance payment. I am looking for someone who is serious about their studiesserious about the study and has a good academic recordtrack. I am really looking forward to getting your help to rent out the room to a suitable student from our university. Yours faithfully, Nathan Adam
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response's strongest feature is its thorough coverage of the apartment, available facilities, financial and social reasons for subletting, and preferred tenant profile. Its main limitation is language precision: several tenancy expressions are unnatural, and the one-paragraph presentation makes the detailed conditions less easy to scan. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the description, reason, and tenant requirements separately while using standard rental vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are fully and specifically addressed in an appropriate formal request to the university officer.
Clarify whether subletting is permitted under the existing tenancy agreement and state the total rent expected from the new tenant.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a logical order from property details to reasons and tenant preferences, but the entire body is presented as one dense paragraph.
Use separate paragraphs for the apartment, the reason for renting, and the preferred tenant and conditions.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers housing and tenancy needs adequately, but phrases such as "get in for," "advance payment," and "academic track" are unnatural in context.
Use standard expressions such as "commit to at least six months," "pay two months' rent in advance," and "strong academic record."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences is generally controlled, though article, preposition, and noun-phrase errors appear intermittently.
Proofread location and tenancy phrases, including "on Central Library Road," "a water heater," and "serious about their studies."
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. Write a letter to the university council officer. In your letter:
- describe your apartment and the facilities available
- mention why you want to rent out the room
- say what kind of tenant you would prefer
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