You are organising a trip to Tenby in the United Kingdom for a group of students from Brighton. Write to Mr Abraham, the Tour Manager of an organisation that arranges trips to Tenby. In your letter: - say when you want to visit - say how long you will stay - say how many students are in your group - describe the accommodation you will require
Sample Response
Dear Mr Abraham, I am Gordon Matthew and I had a phone conversation with you yesterday morning regarding our planned trip to Tenbyregarding the tour we are going to embark on at Tenby. Now I am writing to seek some information about the tour facilities you offerabout tour facilities you offer. We expect to reach Tenby onOn 14th October 2019 and will stay there for three days and two nights. We have 26 people in our group – 16 men and 8 women. In addition, two children will accompany the team and they are our dean’s daughters who are between 8 and 10 years oldbetween 8-10 years old. Among the adults, 14 male and 6 female students will share rooms while two professors will have family suitessuits as their wives and childrenchildren’s are accompanying them. Hence, we will require 10 double rooms10 double-bedrooms with a great view and 2 family suitessuits in totalin the vicinity in total. We hope to keep our expenses moderate and have a peaceful experience while we stay there. Please send me details about the rooms you have available during our stayduring the time, the types of facilitiestype of facilities and the food you servefood you serve with the estimated cost of these servicesestimated costs for all those. Also inform me about the recreational facilities, places worth visitingworth-visiting places and things to dothings-to-do in this area. Should we bring any special equipment or clothingdress for our tour? Finally, please do inform me how can I book the reservation once I am convinced about your arrangement. I look forward to receiving the information as soon as possible from you. Thank you in advance for your kind cooperation. Yours sincerely, Gordon Matthew
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter’s strongest feature is its comprehensive, specific coverage of the travel dates, group composition, accommodation needs, and requested information in an appropriately formal tone. Its main limitation is uneven language accuracy, including several awkward or incorrect forms that occasionally blur details about the party and rooms; the highest priority is to proofread possessives, word forms, and indirect-question structure while keeping the detailed content.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The letter clearly fulfils its purpose, covers every required point with specific detail, and maintains a suitably formal tone.
Check that the breakdown of adults, children, and room occupants is completely unambiguous and internally consistent.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the trip details and accommodation requirements to a well-organised series of additional enquiries.
Separate the travel details, accommodation request, and follow-up questions into distinct paragraphs for easier reading.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently flexible vocabulary conveys detailed accommodation and tour requirements, despite some inaccurate word choices and forms.
Replace awkward forms such as “family suits” and “worth-visiting places” with precise, natural expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of sentence structures is used with generally clear control, although several local errors remain noticeable.
Correct possessive and agreement errors and use statement word order in indirect questions such as “how I can book”.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are organising a trip to Tenby in the United Kingdom for a group of students from Brighton. Write to Mr Abraham, the Tour Manager of an organisation that arranges trips to Tenby. In your letter:
- say when you want to visit
- say how long you will stay
- say how many students are in your group
- describe the accommodation you will require
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