You are going on to a month-long training programme in the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter: - express your interest in the role - request for more information about it - explain what experience you have

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Sample Response

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Dear Mr Victor, I am pleased to be participating inexcited to be a participant in the environment and disaster management training programme that you are organising next month in London. I have longalways wanted to develop my skills in this fieldenhance my skills on that, and this is an excellent opportunity for me to do so. I learntnoticed from a follow-up email that you are looking for a volunteer to organise the social eventsvolunteers for a social event, and I would like to volunteer for this roletake part in this volunteer position. I have been involved in a great deal of voluntary workmany voluntary works since collegesince my college days and have extensive experience in organising such events. At workIn my office, I am often responsible for planningresponsible to plan important events, coordinate with the event management team, supportfacilitate the guest lecturers and ensure that meetings run successfullyensure conducting successful meetings. I enjoy taking on such rolesplaying such roles and I am confidentquite confident I would be the right person to organise your social eventsthe right person for your social event as well. I would, therefore, request you to send me more details regarding the training session and your plan for it so that I can start contributing right away. My participant ID is SEL-087 and you can check my profile before selecting me as an organiser. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you for considering my applicationThanks in advance. Yours sincerely, David Frank

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter presents a confident, courteous application and supports it with relevant organisational experience, giving the response a clear professional direction. The main weakness is that the request for information focuses vaguely on the training session and event plan rather than the organiser's exact duties and expectations. Ask targeted questions about the role, and refine several awkward work-related collocations to make the application more precise and natural.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

The response expresses interest, explains relevant experience, and requests information in a suitable tone, though the requested details are not sufficiently focused on the organiser role.

Next step

Ask specifically about the organiser's responsibilities, available budget, schedule, and support instead of requesting general details about the training session.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

Ideas move logically from interest to experience and then to the request, with cohesive devices used clearly throughout.

Next step

Separate the interest, experience, and information request into distinct paragraphs to make the letter's functional structure easier to follow.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is varied and appropriate to training and event organisation, although several work-related collocations sound unnatural.

Next step

Use natural combinations such as volunteer work, responsible for planning, host guest lecturers, and ensure meetings run successfully.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

The response shows a good range of complex structures with generally clear, accurate sentences despite some recurring preposition and complementation errors.

Next step

Improve control after fixed expressions, especially responsible for planning and ensure that meetings are conducted successfully.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You are going on to a month-long training programme in the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter:

- express your interest in the role

- request for more information about it

- explain what experience you have

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