You are going on to a month-long training programme in the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter: - express your interest in the role - request for more information about it - explain what experience you have
Sample Response
Dear Mr Victor, I am excited to be a participant in the environment and disaster management training programme that you are organising next month in London. I have always wanted to enhance my skills on that, and this is an excellent opportunity for me to do so. I noticed from a follow-up email that you are looking for volunteers for a social event, and I would like to take part in this volunteer position. I have been involved in many voluntary works since my college days and have extensive experience in organising such events. In my office, I am often responsible to plan important events, coordinate with the event management team, facilitate the guest lecturers and ensure conducting successful meetings. I enjoy playing such roles and I am quite confident I would be the right person for your social event as well. I would, therefore, request you to send me more details regarding the training session and your plan for it so that I can start contributing right away. My participant ID is SEL-087 and you can check my profile before selecting me as an organiser. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thanks in advance. Yours sincerely, David Frank
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct preposition Original: enhance my skills on that Suggested revision: develop my skills in this field Why it matters: “Skills in this field” is the natural phrasing for an area of study.
- 2. Name the correct role Original: volunteers for a social event Suggested revision: a volunteer to organise the social events Why it matters: The task concerns one organiser for the programme's social events, not general event volunteers.
- 3. Use natural collocation Original: take part in this volunteer position Suggested revision: volunteer for this role Why it matters: A person volunteers for a role rather than takes part in a position.
- 4. Use uncountable noun Original: many voluntary works Suggested revision: a great deal of voluntary work Why it matters: “Work” is uncountable when referring generally to voluntary experience.
- 5. Fix verb pattern Original: responsible to plan Suggested revision: responsible for planning Why it matters: “Responsible” takes “for” followed by a gerund.
- 6. Choose clearer verb Original: facilitate Suggested revision: support Why it matters: “Support” clearly expresses helping visiting speakers, while “facilitate” is awkward with a person as its object.
- 7. Correct ensure structure Original: ensure conducting successful meetings Suggested revision: ensure that meetings run successfully Why it matters: “Ensure” is naturally followed by a clause stating the intended result.
- 8. Clarify organiser role Original: the right person for your social event as well Suggested revision: the right person to organise your social events Why it matters: This wording directly expresses interest in the organiser role described in the task.
- 9. Use formal opening Original: excited to be a participant in Suggested revision: pleased to be participating in Why it matters: “Pleased to be participating” is concise and appropriately formal for a letter to the organiser.
- 10. Make wording concise Original: always Suggested revision: long Why it matters: This shorter form expresses the same continuing ambition more naturally.
- 11. Choose natural reporting verb Original: noticed Suggested revision: learnt Why it matters: A person learns information from an email rather than notices it from one.
- 12. Use concise time phrase Original: since my college days Suggested revision: since college Why it matters: “Since college” conveys the same period more directly.
Suggested Rewrites
- enhance my skills on that develop my skills in this field
- volunteers for a social event a volunteer to organise the social events
- take part in this volunteer position volunteer for this role
- many voluntary works a great deal of voluntary work
- responsible to plan responsible for planning
- facilitate support
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter presents a confident, courteous application and supports it with relevant organisational experience, giving the response a clear professional direction. The main weakness is that the request for information focuses vaguely on the training session and event plan rather than the organiser's exact duties and expectations. Ask targeted questions about the role, and refine several awkward work-related collocations to make the application more precise and natural.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response expresses interest, explains relevant experience, and requests information in a suitable tone, though the requested details are not sufficiently focused on the organiser role.
Ask specifically about the organiser's responsibilities, available budget, schedule, and support instead of requesting general details about the training session.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas move logically from interest to experience and then to the request, with cohesive devices used clearly throughout.
Separate the interest, experience, and information request into distinct paragraphs to make the letter's functional structure easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and appropriate to training and event organisation, although several work-related collocations sound unnatural.
Use natural combinations such as volunteer work, responsible for planning, host guest lecturers, and ensure meetings run successfully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response shows a good range of complex structures with generally clear, accurate sentences despite some recurring preposition and complementation errors.
Improve control after fixed expressions, especially responsible for planning and ensure that meetings are conducted successfully.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You are going on to a month-long training programme in the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter:
- express your interest in the role
- request for more information about it
- explain what experience you have
Your response
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