You have seen an advertisement for a 'weekend work' in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. Now you want to apply for the job. Write a letter to the hotel manager expressing your interest. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain why you think you would be suitable for the job - ask what work you would be expected to do
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Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the part-time weekend positionjob at your hotel that you advertised in the 'Daily Sunday Times' newspaper on 5th July 2025. I have similar work experiencejob experiences and I hope that you willI am hoping that you would review my resumelook at my resume which I am attaching towith this letter and consider me for the job. I am Preeti AroraGhuraiya, and I am studying a general management coursestudying a general management course at Garden City College, Bangalore and I can speak English and Hindi fluentlyI can fluently speak English and Hindi. This job opportunity looks very interesting and well aligned with my experiencesomething in line with my work experience. I have worked as a receptionist and a front desk executive atwith Hotel Holiday Inn in Delhi from June 2021 totill March 2024. I was responsible for interacting with clients, handling client check-in and check-out procedures and guest enquiriescheckout and so on. I also have some experience as a waitress. I believe my job experience would help me perform my responsibilities effectively in your hotel. The job description in the newspaper does not give details of the responsibilities. Would you be able to let me know about the duties that I will be required to do and if you require any specific skills? I can start immediately and can work for all day every weekendthe whole day every weekend. Please let me know if you need further information regarding my job experience and education. I will be able to provide references for my experience. Looking forward to meeting you to discuss further. Yours faithfully, Preeti Arora
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Why this response received Band 7.5
The response fully addresses the application’s purpose, gives relevant experience, and asks clear questions about the role in an appropriately formal tone. Its professionalism is weakened by the inconsistent surname, the bracketed note, one-block presentation, and several unnatural phrases. Prioritise dividing the letter into purposeful paragraphs, keeping the writer’s identity consistent, and polishing collocations and grammatical patterns.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The application introduces the writer, explains suitability and asks about duties. The inconsistent name and extra bracketed note weaken professionalism.
Keep the relevant content, then revise the wording and organisation points highlighted in the essay comments.
Coherence and Cohesion
The order is logical, but the whole application is one block.
Use clearer paragraphing and smoother links so each bullet point is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is appropriate for job applications, though several collocations are imprecise.
Prefer natural collocations and precise topic vocabulary over overformal or translated-sounding phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is clear overall, but noun number, relative clauses and verb patterns need correction.
Proofread tense, articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries before submitting.