You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter: - describe the situation - explain why you cannot continue at this time - say what action you would like to take
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Muhamad Abdul. I am currently enrolled inam taking a part-time evening course. I am finding it difficultI am having a hard time keeping up with this course. I am afraid I cannot continue the course. The problem is thatMy problem is, I have a full-time job, from 9 a.m.–5 p.m.9am – 5pm. Sometimes, I am asked to workstay extra hours, to finish the remaining workto finish up the rest of the work. That is because the holidays are coming up soon. Also I have to do some preparationsome work preparations for the next day. When I get home at nightAt night when I get home, I am too tired to even prepare dinnerprepare a dinner for myself. Furthermore, I have no timeAlso I have no time to study for this course. I would like to dropwould like drop thethis course this quarter. Then take it again the next quarter. So, please approve my requestaccept my situation. Thank you for your cooperation. Sincerely,cooperation Sincerely M. Abdul
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter communicates the withdrawal request clearly and explains the work pressures in a suitably polite tone. However, it falls slightly below the expected length, develops the requested action only briefly, and relies on repetitive linking and several incomplete or inaccurate sentence structures. The priority is to add a concise request for formal withdrawal and re-enrolment arrangements, then combine related ideas into accurate, well-punctuated paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all three bullet points are addressed, but the action request and supporting detail are brief in an under-length response.
Specify the desired withdrawal and re-enrolment process and ask the tutor to confirm the necessary next steps.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a sensible problem-reason-action sequence, but repeated use of Also and weak paragraphing make the flow mechanical.
Group the situation, reasons, and requested action into separate paragraphs and vary the links between ideas.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for describing work pressure and course withdrawal, though several expressions are repetitive or imprecise.
Use more precise phrases such as overtime, next-day preparation, and defer my enrolment to express the circumstances concisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple sentences are mostly clear, but missing infinitives, fragments, and punctuation errors recur across the letter.
Practise complete verb patterns and sentence boundaries, especially would like to drop and Then I would take it again.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter:
- describe the situation
- explain why you cannot continue at this time
- say what action you would like to take
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