People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than those in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Sample Response

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Undoubtedly, the people's living standards have changedliving standard of people changed with the advancement of technology. Although it has some grave repercussions for health; however, in the high-tech era, the community has improved the quality of life than in the ancient world. I agree with this notion and will explainalong with I will elucidate my views in the forthcoming paragraphs.

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To commence with, there are numerousenormous amenities for the masses in the modern world, but the main ones are the Internet and educationthe predominant one is the Internet and education. To elaborate, institutions and businesses are using computers to perform daily tasksget daily experience, making work much easiermaking work very manageable. Furthermore, people are also better informedsociety is also informed due to smartphones because the Internet is available. In additionApart from it, the education sector has improved since students can use itstudents are used to it and do not need to wait for teachers if they encounterconfront difficulties. They access knowledge from Google and other apps. For instance, Yale Universityyale university observed that 70% of learners are better educated than learners in earlier timesahead of primitive time. Hence, it might lead to more independent lifestyles and education in the world.

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FurthermoreTo strengthen the further views, in the past, people lacked knowledge regarding the Internet, and growth was stagnant. For exampleTo eclipse it, people in the pastancient mortals wrote letters to relatives. They waited a long time for an answer which affected communications as possible as there were fewer opportunities to achieve their ambitions at the proper time. To cite an example, research conducteddone by Kenyatta Universityuniversity shows that 20% of 1,000 people20% of people in 1000 are not able to use phones and the Internet. Therefore, at that time, limited facilities to access informationta get awareness. In addition, a few traditions are still helpful now, which cannot be neglected by technology.

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To conclude, although technology is fast growing which leads to a better life and facilitates yet, people have no option due fast pace of life but to agree and learn about it very fast.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.5

The response maintains an identifiable agreement position and offers relevant points about digital access, education, and communication. However, these ideas are unevenly developed and sometimes expressed through unclear or implausible examples, while frequent grammatical and collocational problems make several claims difficult to follow. Prioritise explaining two precise quality-of-life benefits with credible comparisons, then edit each sentence for complete clause structure and natural word combinations.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

5.5
Scoring rule

A clear agreement position is present, but support is narrow, uneven, and sometimes only loosely connected to quality of life.

Next step

Develop two distinct benefits through specific present-versus-past comparisons and explain how each improves daily life.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5
Scoring rule

Paragraphing provides a visible structure, although mechanical linking and unclear sentence relationships weaken progression within ideas.

Next step

Use simpler transitions and arrange each body paragraph around one claim followed by explanation and a relevant example.

LR

Lexical Resource

5.0
Scoring rule

The response attempts a varied vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision and naturalness.

Next step

Replace memorised or unsuitable expressions with common, accurate combinations such as access information, improve communication, and modern conveniences.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0
Scoring rule

Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in clause formation, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes obscure meaning.

Next step

Prioritise complete sentence structures and check conjunctions carefully, especially when forming contrast and cause-and-effect clauses.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than those in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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