Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
100 percent agree. Water is a basic necessity and need of humans as such corporate institutions denying water as a basic human right should be taken care of by the government.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Inappropriate register Original: 100 percent agree Suggested revision: I completely agree with this statement Why it matters: Using '100 percent agree' is too informal for an academic essay.
- 2. Missing punctuation Original: humans as such Suggested revision: humans. As such, Why it matters: A new sentence should start here to avoid a run-on sentence. 'As such' should also be followed by a comma.
- 3. Informal phrasal verb Original: taken care of Suggested revision: regulated Why it matters: 'Taken care of' is too informal and vague. 'Regulated' or 'held accountable' is more appropriate for an IELTS essay.
- 4. Run-on sentence Original: Water is a basic necessity and need of humans as such corporate institutions denying water as a basic human right should be taken care of by the government. Suggested revision: Water is a basic necessity for humans; therefore, corporate institutions that deny this right should be regulated by the government. Why it matters: This sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation to separate distinct clauses.
- 5. Severe under-length Suggested revision: [Write a full 250-word essay] Why it matters: Your response is only 31 words. You must write at least 250 words to avoid a severe penalty under Task Response.
Suggested Rewrites
- 100 percent agree I completely agree with this statement
- humans as such humans. As such,
- taken care of regulated
- Water is a basic necessity and need of humans as such corporate institutions denying water as a basic human right should be taken care of by the government. Water is a basic necessity for humans; therefore, corporate institutions that deny this right should be regulated by the government.
- Severe under-length [Write a full 250-word essay]
Why this response received Band 2.5
The strongest aspect is that you clearly state your position in response to the prompt. However, the response is extremely short at only 31 words, which is far below the 250-word minimum and prevents any development of your ideas. To improve, you must write a full essay consisting of an introduction, body paragraphs with supporting arguments, and a conclusion.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
You have stated a clear position ('100 percent agree'), but you have not developed any arguments, provided examples, or met the minimum word count of 250 words.
Write at least 250 words by structuring your essay with an introduction, two body paragraphs containing main points and examples, and a concluding paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is no paragraphing or logical progression because the response consists of only one sentence.
Organize your writing into 4 to 5 distinct paragraphs and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary used is extremely limited due to the brevity of the response, though the words chosen are generally relevant to the topic.
Expand your vocabulary by learning synonyms and collocations related to public services, human rights, and government funding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response consists of a single run-on sentence with punctuation and grammatical errors.
Practice writing a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences, ensuring proper punctuation is used to separate clauses.