Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Masses are changing according to the environment needs. In the past time, all people preferred to spend their lives doing the same things while only a handful of people did not prefer it. However, nowadays the former category is lower in number. All people especially youngsters prefer to change and they expect the changes would be enjoyable and for better. Firstly, in these days only young generation give full preference to changes in most of the cases. They embrace changes and think that changes will make their life meaningful. Secondly, changes create new opportunities which make us leap forward. A new job, for instance, might present challenges that push the person to adapt, acquire new knowledge, or add to their skill set. Thirdly, a change can represent a break with the past and an old routine which has become boring and predictable. Finally, as well as making life more fun and interesting, new experiences can be good for our physical and mental health. We find that changes can make us experienced and valuable. On the flip side of the coin, people like old generation avoid changes in many cases because they do not want to become materialistic. They opine we should give our full attention to one thing and to the old way of traditional living. They mainly avoid major changes and thus remain on a safe side while missing many opportunities that the changes might have bought. They do not want to step outside their comfort zone, prefer following their daily habits. They feel satisfied with their circumstance. Perhaps they feel that a routine gives them structure, maybe they are not fond of surprises or confident enough to face new challenges. They believed that staying secure and maintaining the current circumstance is the best way to live life safer. To put it in a nutshell, both side seem to have their own merits. However, I also persuaded that change is unavoidable and necessary if someone wants to keep up wit a fast pace of modern life. Even if some people maintain a form of stability by following a routine, the world keeps spinning and evolving.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use the standard time phrase Original: In the past time Suggested revision: In the past Why it matters: The fixed expression for an earlier period is 'in the past'.
- 2. Express the reduced group naturally Original: the former category is lower in number Suggested revision: fewer people now belong to the former category Why it matters: The replacement uses the comparative quantifier required for a smaller number of people.
- 3. Remove the unnecessary preposition Original: in these days Suggested revision: these days Why it matters: The time expression 'these days' does not take 'in'.
- 4. Fix article and agreement Original: only young generation give Suggested revision: only the younger generation gives Why it matters: 'Generation' requires the article and comparative adjective, and the singular subject takes 'gives'.
- 5. Use a natural preference phrase Original: full preference to changes Suggested revision: a strong preference for change Why it matters: The standard collocation is 'a preference for' something.
- 6. Match the plural reference Original: life Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: The plural subject 'they' requires the plural possessive noun 'lives'.
- 7. Use natural result adjectives Original: make us experienced and valuable Suggested revision: make us more experienced and capable Why it matters: 'Capable' describes increased ability more naturally than saying people become valuable.
- 8. Refer to the group directly Original: people like old generation Suggested revision: older people Why it matters: The original phrase is ungrammatical and treats a generation as an example of a person.
- 9. Add a reporting clause Original: They opine we should Suggested revision: They believe that people should Why it matters: The revision supplies the required conjunction and avoids shifting abruptly to inclusive 'we'.
- 10. Remove redundant wording Original: to the old way of traditional living Suggested revision: to traditional ways of living Why it matters: 'Old way' and 'traditional' duplicate meaning, and the plural form suits a general lifestyle.
- 11. Use the fixed article Original: a Suggested revision: the Why it matters: The idiom requires the definite article 'the'.
- 12. Use the correct participle Original: that the changes might have bought Suggested revision: that these changes might have brought Why it matters: The past participle of 'bring' is 'brought', and 'these' points to the changes already mentioned.
Suggested Rewrites
- In the past time In the past
- the former category is lower in number fewer people now belong to the former category
- in these days these days
- only young generation give only the younger generation gives
- full preference to changes a strong preference for change
- life lives
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response’s strongest feature is its broad coverage of why people embrace change and why others value routine, ending with a clear preference for adapting to modern life. Its main limitation is that one-paragraph presentation and frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken the comparison; the highest-priority improvement is to organise the two views into separate paragraphs and develop each through balanced, precise explanations rather than generational generalisations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed with several relevant reasons and the conclusion gives a clear opinion, although some points rely on broad stereotypes or limited explanation.
Develop a fairer comparison by explaining genuine benefits and costs of both stability and change across different age groups.
Coherence and Cohesion
The movement from benefits of change to reasons for routine and then the opinion is understandable, but one long paragraph and mechanical sequencing weaken organisation.
Use separate introduction, viewpoint, and conclusion paragraphs with topic sentences that signal the purpose of each section.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss opportunity, routine, security, and adaptation, but recurrent inaccurate combinations and word forms limit control.
Correct phrases such as “the younger generation,” “on the safe side,” “satisfied with their circumstances,” and “convinced that.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence forms, but frequent agreement, article, tense, and clause-boundary errors remain noticeable throughout.
Check subject–verb agreement and articles systematically, then separate comma-spliced ideas into complete sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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