Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
There are arguments that individuals should refrain from doingshould be refrained from doing new things and must stick to traditional methods. However, some people are convinced that individuals need to venture into some newnoble experiences in life. In my opinion, I would argue that changes in activities and practicesalterations in some activities and practices are essential forto achieving progress and success. Primarily, it can never be denied that some people may become comfortable with their routinesthe routine practices in life, to which they are accustomedwhich they are more accustomed. Clearly, people will not need to learn new things as they are already more familiar withmore cognizant about the activities that they habitually perform. For instance, in this modern era, older peoplethe seniority group will find it confusing to read newspapers on an electronic tablet becausedue to the fact that they are not aware of its new features and how to operate the devicethe proper operation of the gadget. For these reasons, older peoplethe geriatric individuals do not need to learn the settings and the high technology applications as it will take them a long period of time to adapt to this technologyadapt this product of technology. However, it can be argued that people's livesthe life of people will become more adventurous if they opt forto new trends and experiences. As can be expected, the progress and success in life are often achieved when a person tries to explore new ideas and practices, which might be beneficial for the improvement of his or her life. To illustrate, a businessman, who hashave experienced failures in his or her business, will resort to new strategies in order to make the business more stablefirms and highly profitable. This can be done by abandoning the old-fashioned styles and techniques while accepting the modern ways, which could make the people’s lives more favourable. The new idea, a new way of life and changes to the old way life often bring new opportunities to people and getting adapted to the changes is the primary means of survivalsurvivals and advancement. In conclusion, there is a heated argument whether people must remain to the conservative ways of life or resort to modern trends. However, I personally believe that the ideology of success can be reached if people will embrace the new-fangled ways of living in the society.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response discusses both preferences, supports each with a relevant example, and maintains a clear view that embracing change promotes progress and success. Its main limitations are the complete absence of paragraphing and frequent unnatural vocabulary and grammar, which make several otherwise relevant ideas sound imprecise. The highest-priority improvement is to separate the two views and opinion into clear paragraphs, then express each argument with simpler, more accurate language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are developed with examples and the writer's preference is clear, although some claims about older people are overly absolute.
Acknowledge that familiarity may provide efficiency or security without implying that older people should avoid learning altogether.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses recognisably from routine to change and a conclusion, but presenting the entire essay as one paragraph weakens organisation.
Use separate introduction, same-routine, change, and conclusion paragraphs with focused topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a broad vocabulary, but frequent strained or inaccurate choices reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace terms such as noble experiences, seniority group, more firms, and means of survivals with direct, idiomatic wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is attempted, but agreement, preposition, article, plural, and conditional errors recur throughout.
Prioritise accurate clause patterns and subject-verb agreement, especially in relative clauses and conditional statements.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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