Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.
Sample Response
Parents throughout the world spend time reading with their offspring to prepare them for school, where their literacy skillsschool where their literacy skills are further developed; however, recent research suggests that focusing on reading at an early age can be detrimental, and participating in fun activities would be far more beneficial. I am a strong advocate of this approach, and the its benefitsbenefits of it will be covered in this essay.
A fundamental reason for this is that there is no single biologically appropriate age for learning to readno biological age for reading, and pushing infants to acquire this skill before they are ready could have repercussions. For example, in the UK, many boys are reluctant readers, possibly because they were forced to readbecause of being forced to read, which may have put them off readingand this turned them off reading. By focusing on other activities and developing other skills such as creativity and imagination, when they are ready to read, they usually acquire this skill rapidly.
In addition, the importance of encouraging creativity and developing a child’s imagination must be acknowledged. Through play, youngsters develop social and cognitive skills; for example, they are more likely, for example, they are more likely to learn vocabulary through context rather than learning it from a book. Furthermore, play allows youngsters to mature emotionally and gain self-confidenceemotionally, and gain self-confidence.
There is no scientific research which suggests reading at a young age is essential for a child’s development; moreover, evidencedevelopment, moreover, evidence suggests the reverse is true. In Finland, early years’ education focuses on playing. Reading is only encouraged if a child shows an interest in developing this skill.
This self-directed approach certainly does not result in Finnish school leavers falling behind their foreign counterparts. In fact, Finland was ranked sixth in the world for readingthe sixth best in the world in terms of reading.
Despite being a supporter of this non-reading approach, I am not vehemently opposed to it and I strongly recommend incorporating bedtime stories into a child’s daily routine. However, reading as a regular day time activity should be swapped for something which allows a child to develop other skills.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents a clear, nuanced position and supports it with varied reasons and relevant examples, using an impressively broad vocabulary. Its main limitation is that several claims are asserted more strongly than the evidence warrants, and some paragraph divisions and comma-linked clauses weaken the flow. The highest-priority improvement is to develop the evidence more cautiously while integrating closely related points into fuller, grammatically cleaner paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the question directly, sustains a clear position, and develops several relevant reasons with examples.
Qualify broad claims about research and explain the Finnish example more fully so that the evidence supports the conclusion convincingly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses clearly, but closely related points are sometimes separated into short paragraphs and a few links are loosely punctuated.
Combine the connected Finland paragraphs and use complete sentence boundaries to make progression smoother.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide, flexible, and generally precise, with effective language for education, development, and comparative argument.
Refine occasional awkward choices such as “biological age for reading” and “day time activity” for greater naturalness.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with strong control, although several comma splices and a minor tense inconsistency remain.
Separate independent clauses around expressions such as “for example” and “moreover,” and maintain consistent tense when describing general tendencies.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.
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