Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.
Sample Response
Parents throughout the world spend timeplace spend time reading with their offspring to prepare them for school, whereschool where their literacy skills are further developed; however, recent research suggests that focusing on reading at an early age can be detrimental, and participating in fun activities would be far more beneficial. I am a strong advocate of this approach, and its benefitsthe benefits of it will be covered in this essay.
A fundamental reason for this is that there is no fixed biological age for learning to readno biological age for reading, and pushing infants to acquire this skill before they are ready could have repercussions. For example, in the UK, many boys are reluctant readers, possibly because they were forced to readpossibly because of being forced to read, and this has turned them off readingthis turned them off reading. By focusing on other activities and developing other skills such as creativity and imagination, when they are ready to read, they usually acquire this skill rapidly.
In addition, the importance of encouraging creativity and developing a child’s imagination must be acknowledged. Through play, youngsters develop social and cognitive skills; for example, theyskills, for example, they are more likely to learn vocabulary through context rather than learning it from a book.
Furthermore, play allows youngsters to mature emotionally and gainemotionally, and gain self-confidence. There is no scientific research which suggests reading at a young age is essential for a child’s development; moreover, evidencedevelopment, moreover, evidence suggests the reverse is true. In Finland, early years’ education focuses on playing.
Reading is only encouraged if a child shows an interest in developing this skill. This self-directed approach certainly does not result in Finnish school leavers falling behind their foreign counterparts. In fact, Finland was ranked sixth in the worldranked the sixth-best in the world in terms of reading.
Despite being a supporter of this non-reading approach, I strongly recommend incorporating bedtime stories into a child’s daily routine. However, reading as a regular daytime activity should be swapped for an activity that allowssomething which allows the child to develop other skills.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a clear, nuanced position and develops it through logically sequenced reasons and relevant examples, using a broad and precise vocabulary. Its main limitation is that a few claims are asserted too categorically and several sentence-boundary or wording slips interrupt an otherwise polished performance; the highest-priority improvement is to substantiate the comparison with reading more carefully while tightening punctuation in complex sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout, and the benefits of play are well developed with relevant examples and a suitably qualified conclusion.
Support categorical claims about research more cautiously and compare play with reading more explicitly at each major point.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses clearly through distinct, logically ordered ideas, with effective referencing and cohesive control.
Combine the two short Finland-related paragraphs or strengthen their link so that the example reads as one fully integrated unit.
Lexical Resource
A wide and precise lexical range conveys nuanced ideas naturally, with only isolated awkward wording.
Remove slips such as place spend and choose more exact phrasing when describing readiness to learn to read.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used accurately overall, although a few comma splices and local errors remain.
Separate independent clauses correctly and check tense consistency when moving between general claims and past examples.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.
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