Some people opine that cinema will eventually lose its appeal to mass people and very few people will go to cinema halls. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
Many believe that multiplex & cinema is on dying spree and eventually, the cinema will die his own death, due to shift in Technology, which has literally bring cinema at Home. I am of the opinionsort of in opinion that, trueactual movie lovers will never abandon the big screenforget big screen. May, the number will be on downward trend and in the business context, it will not be as profitable as in last few decades.
Still, the charm of cinema is never going to die. As an individual, I always love to watch movies on the silver screen, the reason being is, fill joy of a movie can only be possible with theatre, no one is there to disturb & you can uninterruptedly enjoy or feel the story line. One always rates a movie more highlyrates a movie better after seeing itif he has seen it on a big screen.
However, it is also true thatanother aspect is also somewhat true that cinema iscinema a is on the decline. Technological innovation and developmentInnovation and upscaling in Technology are the main reasons that makethe prime reasons, which make people think that the era of the silver screenera of Silver Screen is bound to die. Technology has brought the big screen into the homebrought the big screen at home with better sound systems, big LED screens and, most importantly,& most importantly the convenience of watching films from the comfort of homethe ease of watching at the comfort of home.
On a positive note for cinemasOn a high note for the big screen, the main advantage is thatthe best part is, no one can watch the latest filmswatch latest flicks at home and this will ensure that& this will make sure that people keep coming to the big screen to watch the latest workfor watching the latest work of their favourite stars.
Summing up, favour for big screen may decline, in reality, it is never going to die in next decade or so.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear qualified disagreement and presents relevant reasons why cinema attendance may decline without disappearing entirely. Its main limitation is that the supporting ideas are brief and sometimes rely on personal or absolute claims, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken precision. Develop each reason with a specific, credible example and edit sentences for accurate structures and natural word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the question with a consistent qualified position and relevant reasons, but several ideas are insufficiently developed or overly absolute.
Support each main reason with a specific explanation or example and qualify claims about what audiences can or cannot watch at home.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence is logical and the overall progression is clear, although some long sentences contain loosely connected ideas and mechanical transitions.
Give each paragraph one clearly developed central idea and divide run-on sentences into accurately linked stages of reasoning.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a useful range of cinema-related vocabulary, but frequent unnatural collocations and word-form choices noticeably reduce accuracy.
Replace expressions such as on dying spree and fill joy with standard academic collocations, and check word forms before using less familiar vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer uses both simple and complex forms, but frequent errors in articles, verb forms, agreement, sentence boundaries, and punctuation weaken control.
Prioritise complete sentence structures and accurate verb phrases, then proofread every sentence for articles and comma splices.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people opine that cinema will eventually lose its appeal to mass people and very few people will go to cinema halls. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
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