Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Some are of the belief that any proposedprospective reforms to combat climate change will necessarily be harmfulinjurious to businesses. In my opinion, despite the nichemarginal market for eco-friendly companies, this is largely true.
Environmentalists often argue that green businesses can be profitable. There are numerous examples from all over the world of corporations excelling in sectors such as food, automotive, energy and fashionfields such as eco-friendly foods, cars, energy and fashion. For instance, Tesla has become one of the largest automobile manufacturers over the last decade with a unique focus on stylish electricelectronic cars. Their success is the greatest so farby far the greatest so far in the emerging market for green consumer productsemerging sector of green energy consumer products and will doubtlessly inspire a generation of entrepreneurs to view protecting the environment as a potential catalyst for growth rather than a deterrent to profits.
However, the examples above are still dwarfed by most industries and governmental regulation will surely hurt large and small businesses. In the past, well-intentioned environmental policy has failed to take into account the far-reaching impact of even the simplest stipulations. For example, when nations band together to sign treaties such as the recent Paris Accords, nearly all countries eventually fail to live up to the standards laid out because of the economic costs and their potential effect on governments’ domestic popularityeconomic downsides and how that could affect their popularity domestically. As soon as one nation begins to fall short of itstheir commitment, other countries have no choice but to also prioritise corporations over the environment for fear of losing power in futurelater elections.
In conclusion, though there is some potential in green business models, they will always have dire economic repercussions. This does not make them less justified but it is an important consideration to temper expectations of progress.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response is strongest in its assured language and clear progression from the opportunity argument to the case for economic harm, while maintaining an explicit position throughout. Its main limitation is that the negative side becomes focused on governments failing to honour treaties rather than explaining in sufficient detail how reforms directly damage businesses; prioritise developing that causal link with a specific commercial mechanism or example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and a clear opinion are presented, although the case for harmful business effects is less directly developed than the opportunity argument.
Explain a specific route by which a reform raises business costs or restricts operations, then connect that effect explicitly to the stated position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organised, with focused paragraphs and cohesive progression that makes the contrast between the two views easy to follow.
Make the transition into the opposing argument more exact by replacing the vague comparison between examples and industries with a direct contrast of scale.
Lexical Resource
A wide and precise vocabulary is used fluently, with only occasional imprecise choices such as referring to electric cars as electronic cars.
Refine collocations and technical word choice so that otherwise sophisticated phrasing remains consistently natural and exact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled accurately, and the few agreement or reference slips do not impede communication.
Proofread long sentences for pronoun agreement and parallel structure, especially where singular national actors are followed by plural reference.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
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