Some people think computers and the Internet are important in children's study, but others think students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
How children study and learn today, both at home and school, isare radically different from the past, and the greater availability and relatively low costincreased availability and relatively low price of modern technology have been instrumental in this change. However, I feel that while modern technologies, such as computers and the Internet, are important in supportingassisting a child's learning, this learning should be guided and directed by experienced human teachersby the experience of human teachers.
Proponents of technology in children's education say that technology can present information vividly and in a novel waypresent knowledge in a vivid and novel way. They assert that computers and the Internet can enable students to enhance their ability to overcome difficultiesgeneral understanding of how to solve difficulties in their studies while also giving themas well as give them vital skills for their future livesvital skills for future life. With technologyWith the technology, childrenthose children learn in a fun way and this learning is often more intuitive than teacher-led classroom lessonsthe class lectures by the teachers.
By contrastOn the contrary, the traditional, long-established practicetraditional and long-established practice is for children to study and gain knowledge at school under teachers' guidancestudy and gain knowledge at school guided by teachers. Proponents of this method state that a school is a place where students gather to be educated and learn from each other, and taught by human educators which technology can not replace. At school, for instance, students' development is structured step by steporchestrated stage by stage, step by step by experienced teachers, and their acquisition of knowledge is guided and systematically reinforcedbacked up systematically.
In my opinion, technology can not teach children independentlyall by itself and it needs human intervention. The information shown to children has to be preprogrammed and needs constant updating by human teachers. This is why human teachers can teach students more effectively and they can use technology to teach even better.
To conclude, modern technologies can complement more traditional teaching and learning methods without being used as a replacement for traditional methods. It is expected that experienced teachers would teach children and use technology to better facilitate teaching and learning at schools.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The essay presents a clear position, discusses both perspectives in a balanced structure, and uses a broad academic vocabulary to explain how technology and teachers can complement one another. Some supporting claims remain general, and several awkward grammatical constructions interrupt an otherwise fluent argument; the highest-priority improvement is to develop each view with a more concrete illustration while simplifying inaccurate sentence structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the writer's preference for teacher-guided technology is clear and consistently maintained.
Support the benefits claimed for each approach with a specific classroom or learning example rather than relying mainly on general assertions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through well-focused paragraphs, with the position reinforced effectively in the final sections.
Use contrast transitions more precisely and reduce repeated references to teachers and technology within adjacent sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a wide academic vocabulary, including generally effective choices such as 'instrumental', 'orchestrated', and 'facilitate'.
Refine awkward collocations such as 'solve difficulties in their studies' and 'class lectures by the teachers' for greater naturalness.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is attempted successfully, although agreement, coordination, and relative-clause errors recur in several sentences.
Review the grammatical subject and clause links in long sentences, especially constructions such as 'educators which technology can not replace'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think computers and the Internet are important in children's study, but others think students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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