Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Sample Response
As globalizationthe globalization advances, people in different countries are purchasing similar merchandise. As a result, manyMany find that countries are becoming increasingly similar. In this essay, both sides of this development will be discussed before giving my opinion. Admittedly, the opponents of this trend present valid concerns. Since products with similar features are becoming more prevalent around the world, it is hard for people to enjoy exotic shopping experiences. It is often the case that international tourists find that malls and stores in foreign countries are filled withof the same products manufactured by the same companies back in their home countries, which makes them wonder what the purpose iswhat is the purpose of purchasing the merchandise that is also available back homeback in home. Furthermore, with the prevalence of standardized commodities, it is hard for unique local artisanslocal unique craftsmen to survive, whose crafts areis often associated with local culture. A part of the local traditional culture perishes if the unique crafts cease to exist. Nevertheless, it would be an omission not to consider the positive side of this development. As standardized commoditiesAs the standardized commodities are available anywhere in the world, home-sick individuals can always enjoy products that are similar to those in their hometown even if they are away, alleviating their homesickness. In addition, although standardized commodities, which are often quality-guaranteed, cannot surprise you in a good way, they also will notit also won't surprise you in a bad way. Travellers always have a safe option if they do not want to purchase local productsa local products, which are more likely to be defective especially onin important or emergency occasions where they do not want anything to go wrong. In conclusion, I believe this trend is overall positive. Although standardized commodities cannot surprise tourists who like exotic experiences, they offer a steady and safe choice for those who want to prioritize reliabilityplay it safe. Moreover, standardized merchandise is often better in termsterm of quality than local alternativesthose local products.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay effectively explores both the drawbacks and benefits of globalized products before reaching a clear, supported opinion. While the ideas are organized logically and expressed with good vocabulary, frequent minor grammatical inaccuracies slightly detract from the overall polish. To improve, focus on refining subject-verb agreement, article usage, and prepositions to ensure higher grammatical accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The candidate addresses all parts of the prompt by presenting both arguments and clearly stating a nuanced position in the conclusion.
State your personal position earlier in the introduction rather than outlining a neutral approach before deciding in the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is logical with clear topic sentences and appropriate cohesive devices facilitating smooth paragraph transitions.
Vary your transition signals beyond standard formulaic markers to create a more natural flow between sentences.
Lexical Resource
A good range of topic-specific vocabulary is used accurately to discuss globalization, local culture, and standardized goods.
Pay closer attention to word collocations and fixed prepositional phrases to make word choices sound fully natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex sentence structures is attempted, though minor errors in agreement, article usage, and preposition choice occur regularly.
Proofread your work carefully to catch small grammatical errors such as plural noun-article mismatches and incorrect prepositions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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