Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
First of all, I will consider how a person’s choice of clothes reveal s his culture. this is true in some ways, for example, in many countries people have a distinctive national style of wear and some particular clothes and fabrics are typical of certain areas. therefore, clothes can sometimes reveal the ethnic origins and culture of a person, but as so many people nowadays dress in business suits or jeans and t-shirts worldwide this is becoming less and less true.
As the character is concerned, we can tell in some places if the wearer of clothes is a follower of fashion. another aspect of the dress is whether the clothes look clean and ironed or grubb y and very casual. this might tell us how much concerned they are about to be smart. however, the way someone dresses can also be misleading at times. there are some people which wear clothes that seems very unusual and strange but often they are just following fashion and are not unusual or strange people in their personalities at all.
In conclusion, I would say that we can find out something about a person from their style of dress but only the surface things, and not the deeper character.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix agreement and wording Original: clothes reveal s his culture Suggested revision: clothing reveals his culture Why it matters: The revision removes the split verb and gives the singular subject correct agreement.
- 2. Capitalize sentence opening Original: therefore Suggested revision: Therefore Why it matters: The first word of a new sentence requires a capital letter.
- 3. Capitalize the garment Original: t Suggested revision: T Why it matters: The standard spelling capitalizes the T in T-shirts.
- 4. Separate the clauses Original: worldwide this Suggested revision: worldwide, this Why it matters: A comma is needed after the introductory dependent clause before the main clause.
- 5. Fix the transition Original: As the character is concerned Suggested revision: Regarding character Why it matters: Regarding character is the natural phrase for shifting to this aspect of the discussion.
- 6. Clarify the construction Original: we can tell in some places if Suggested revision: in some cases, we can tell whether Why it matters: In some cases expresses circumstance, and whether correctly introduces alternatives.
- 7. Remove redundancy Original: wearer of clothes Suggested revision: wearer Why it matters: Wearer already identifies a person wearing clothes, so the added phrase is redundant.
- 8. Capitalize sentence opening Original: another Suggested revision: Another Why it matters: The first word of a new sentence requires a capital letter.
- 9. Use natural reference Original: of the dress Suggested revision: of a person's appearance Why it matters: This phrase naturally refers to the aspect of clothing being observed.
- 10. Use clear wording Original: grubb y and very casual Suggested revision: unkempt and very casual Why it matters: Unkempt removes the malformed word and clearly describes an untidy appearance.
- 11. Capitalize sentence opening Original: this might tell Suggested revision: This might indicate Why it matters: The revision corrects sentence-initial capitalization and uses a verb that fits the inference.
- 12. Fix adjective structure Original: how much concerned they are about to be smart Suggested revision: how concerned they are with looking smart Why it matters: Concerned takes how without much here, and with looking expresses the intended concern naturally.
Suggested Rewrites
- clothes reveal s his culture clothing reveals his culture
- therefore Therefore
- t T
- worldwide this worldwide, this
- As the character is concerned Regarding character
- we can tell in some places if in some cases, we can tell whether
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear, nuanced position and organises its discussion sensibly around culture and character. However, it is under length, so its relevant points remain briefly explained, while frequent agreement, relative-clause, capitalization, and word-form errors reduce control; prioritise adding a developed example for each main idea and proofreading sentence boundaries and subject-verb agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both culture and character with a clear qualified position, but its under-length discussion provides limited development and support.
Reach the required length by explaining each main claim through a specific example and its significance before moving to the next idea.
Coherence and Cohesion
The culture and character points are arranged in a sensible progression, though some referencing and connective phrasing are mechanical or unclear.
Build each paragraph around one explicit topic sentence and use pronouns and linking expressions with clearly identifiable references.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes some less common items, but word-form errors and awkward collocations occur repeatedly.
Replace unnatural phrases such as "national style of wear" and "surface things" with precise, idiomatic expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex structures are attempted, but frequent capitalization, agreement, relative-pronoun, and sentence-construction errors weaken accuracy.
Proofread every sentence for capitalization and subject-verb agreement, especially after singular noun phrases and relative pronouns.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. do you agree or disagree?
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