Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes.
Sample Response
The strength of a house lies in its base so when constructing a house, it is essential to consider all necessary measures required for its security. This can be achieved with the implementation of proper building strategies upon which the government should keep a check.
In order to make construction plans stronger, the government should first design building ethics that ensure effective construction of homes. The government takes work from people in the form of contractors, labours and material dealers, but ultimately the central regulating body is the government that can keep a check and balance. It is their duty to make sure that high-quality construction material is used, the architectural layout is legal and the labour is professionally skilled. Places where land favours outbreaks of the earthquake such as Japan, their government has announced earthquake proof building plans to avoid hazards. Let us take an example of the UK, where houses are made of wood for people’s comfort because the UK has cold weather so wooden houses provide better insulation than cemented houses. British government ensures that this building ethic is applied.
Building and housing systems where an electric security system is incorporated, fewer incidents of burglary and stealing take place. Just as the government brings these systems into action in their state buildings such as banks and minister houses, they should consider these facts while passing local residential house maps. People who build the homes will automatically come under state’s eye if strict codes will come into action. People who do fraud, disciplinary action should be taken against them. Places, where people escape such illegal acts, end up at the cost of the life of people.
Hence, it is the foremost duty of the ruling government to make and apply building codes countrywide. They rule the state so they are the main caretakers of local residents.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Precise term Original: building ethics Suggested revision: building regulations Why it matters: The essay concerns enforceable codes, not ethics.
- 2. Worker noun Original: labours Suggested revision: labourers Why it matters: Labourers refers to workers.
- 3. Natural collocation Original: keep a check and balance Suggested revision: provide effective oversight Why it matters: This states the regulatory role precisely.
- 4. Hyphenate compound Original: earthquake proof Suggested revision: earthquake-proof Why it matters: The compound adjective needs a hyphen.
- 5. Missing article Original: British government ensures Suggested revision: The British government ensures Why it matters: A specific government needs the definite article.
- 6. Off-topic support Original: electric security system Suggested revision: structural safety inspection system Why it matters: Burglary prevention does not support the argument about construction safety.
- 7. Conditional form Original: if strict codes will come into action Suggested revision: if strict codes come into force Why it matters: Use the present simple in this if-clause.
- 8. Faulty structure Original: People who do fraud, disciplinary action should be taken against them. Suggested revision: Disciplinary action should be taken against people who commit fraud. Why it matters: The original has no grammatical link between its parts.
- 9. Precise opening Original: strength of a house lies in its base Suggested revision: structural safety depends on sound foundations and construction standards Why it matters: The revision connects the opening directly to building regulation.
- 10. Safety term Original: measures required for its security Suggested revision: measures required for its structural safety Why it matters: Security can suggest crime prevention rather than safe construction.
- 11. Clear coordination Original: upon which the government Suggested revision: and the government should oversee their implementation Why it matters: The original relative structure has an unclear antecedent.
- 12. Natural collocation Original: make construction plans stronger Suggested revision: ensure safer construction Why it matters: Plans are not made stronger in this context.
Suggested Rewrites
- building ethics building regulations
- labours labourers
- keep a check and balance provide effective oversight
- earthquake proof earthquake-proof
- British government ensures The British government ensures
- electric security system structural safety inspection system
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay maintains a clear position that government should create and enforce building rules, and it offers some relevant points about materials, legal plans and skilled labour. However, substantial discussion of burglary systems and national housing materials drifts from structural safety, while language errors frequently weaken precision. Focus each paragraph on enforceable construction standards and edit sentence structure and collocations carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
A clear position is supported, but some examples are inaccurate or only loosely relevant to building codes.
Develop inspection, licensing and penalties rather than security alarms or climate-based materials.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and overall direction are clear, though progression within body paragraphs is uneven.
Give each paragraph one controlling idea followed by explanation and a relevant example.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate topic vocabulary, alongside frequent inaccurate collocations.
Use building regulations, enforcement authority, inspections and sanctions precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex forms are attempted, but fragments, agreement and conditional errors recur.
Check that every sentence has a subject and main verb, and avoid will in if-clauses.