People can prepare various types of foods easily and in less time nowadays. What contributed to this improvement and has this development changed the way we live?
Sample Response
When the world is moving very fast with the new technologies, new equipment has been introduced to make the life easier. This has been effect in food preparation process also. Hence food is one of the major need, people are willing to enjoy different flavours in easy manner time to time.
As mentioned earlier, new equipment has been introduced and it will lead to saving time when preparing foods. Those days’ traditional methods took several hours to cook foods. Equipment like food processor can use to multiple tasks like blending, chopping, slicing and so on. Therefore preparing foods very easily is not a secret anymore. So the saved time can be used for many other extra activities like studying, entertaining, reading and so on.
Secondly, instant foods have been widely spread among people, specially, university students and employees who are staying away from families. Instead of enjoying outside foods people are willing to prepare foods for them. By reading the given instructions, instant foods can be prepared even without knowing anything. Even though these foods are not much good for health, still it’s far better than restaurants or outdoor foods. So again live has changed and improved.
Children are willing to enjoy a variety of foods. But modern mums are very busy with the fast running world. They don’t have time to try new foods by themselves. But the new lifestyle has been introduced different kinds of foods using the same old recipe with the new taste. Kids will enjoy these homemade foods as its special gift from their loving mums. Therefore interrelation between family members has been improved eventually.
As a conclusion, my thought is while giving priority to healthy wealthy foods people have to prepare them. No matter how far foods have become easier to prepare, if it’s not good for our health ultimate result will not help to improve people's live.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use active verb Original: has been effect in food preparation process also Suggested revision: has also affected the food preparation process Why it matters: The present perfect requires the verb affected, and also belongs before it.
- 2. Use in-the-past phrase Original: Those days’ traditional methods Suggested revision: Traditional methods in the past Why it matters: The revised phrase refers to earlier methods naturally and avoids the incorrect possessive.
- 3. Use prepare food Original: cook foods Suggested revision: prepare food Why it matters: Food is normally uncountable in this general sense, and prepare covers the full process.
- 4. Remove redundant extra Original: many other extra activities Suggested revision: many other activities Why it matters: Other and extra repeat the same meaning.
- 5. Use become widespread Original: instant foods have been widely spread among people Suggested revision: instant foods have become widespread Why it matters: Become widespread is the natural collocation for growing popularity.
- 6. Use especially Original: specially, university students Suggested revision: especially university students Why it matters: Especially introduces a notable group, and no comma should separate it from the noun phrase.
- 7. Clarify living situation Original: who are staying away from families Suggested revision: who live away from their families Why it matters: The simple present describes a general situation, and families needs a possessive determiner.
- 8. Use restaurant food Original: outside foods Suggested revision: restaurant food Why it matters: Restaurant food is the natural term for meals prepared outside the home.
- 9. Use reflexive pronoun Original: prepare foods for them Suggested revision: prepare food for themselves Why it matters: The subject and beneficiary are the same people, so a reflexive pronoun is required.
- 10. Specify cooking knowledge Original: without knowing anything Suggested revision: without any cooking knowledge Why it matters: The revised phrase identifies the knowledge relevant to preparing the food.
- 11. Use not very healthy Original: not much good for health Suggested revision: not very healthy Why it matters: Healthy is the natural adjective for food's effect on health.
- 12. Fix comparison and agreement Original: still it’s far better than restaurants or outdoor foods Suggested revision: they are still far better than restaurant or takeaway food Why it matters: The plural subject requires they are, and the comparison must be between foods.
Suggested Rewrites
- has been effect in food preparation process also has also affected the food preparation process
- Those days’ traditional methods Traditional methods in the past
- cook foods prepare food
- many other extra activities many other activities
- instant foods have been widely spread among people instant foods have become widespread
- specially, university students especially university students
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies relevant causes of quicker food preparation, particularly modern appliances and instant foods, and links them to saved time, home cooking, and family life. Its strongest feature is the range of practical effects considered, but several ideas are vague or implausible and frequent language errors sometimes make the reasoning difficult to follow. The priority is to organise clear cause-and-effect paragraphs and express each lifestyle change in accurate, controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are addressed through appliances, instant food, saved time, and family effects, but development is uneven and several claims are unclear or insufficiently supported.
Choose two main causes and explain one specific lifestyle effect of each, including a balanced point about health or nutrition.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses functional paragraphs and a generally recognisable progression, though links between some examples, family relationships, and the main task are weak.
Structure each body paragraph as one cause followed by its direct consequence, removing details that do not clearly support that connection.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers cooking, technology, convenience, and health, but frequent inaccurate word forms and collocations substantially reduce precision.
Use natural phrases such as 'food-preparation appliances', 'ready-made meals', 'save time', 'eat home-cooked food', and 'healthy meals'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, plurals, and clause construction often strain clarity.
Write shorter complete sentences and check every verb for tense and passive form before adding subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People can prepare various types of foods easily and in less time nowadays. What contributed to this improvement and has this development changed the way we live?
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