Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Technology has revolutionised the way audiences watch movies todaythese days. With the internet, smartphones and tablets, we can now watch movies anywhere at any timeanywhere and anytime. Some people believe that this is a substitute for going to the cinema. Personally, I think that movie theatres deliver an unparalleled experience because some films cannot be fully enjoyedas not all movies can be enjoyed on small screens. On the one hand, the advent of smart devices has threatened the cinema industryput the cinema business at stake as it has changed how people watch filmshas redefined how people can watch a movie. Recently, many people have begun relying on their smartphones to watch their favourite videos and movies at their convenience. For example, many streaming services such as Netflixmobile applications, such as Netflix, provide users with accessprovide users access to millions of titlescontent at an affordable price, including those that are not shown in theatres. This has given people a compelling reason to watch filmsa good reason to enjoy movies with their familiesfamily at home. It would be costly and inconvenient if people had to watch those films at a cinemathose movies in the cinema. On the other hand, theatres providegive an unmatched experience that viewers can not get while watching movies on a small hand-held screen. For example, in movie theatres, films are projected on a large screen with a high-quality surrounding sound system and a comfortable seat, where spectators can enjoy the film to its fullest. In addition, many cinema operatorsproviders have recently introduced new theatre concepts to appeal to different audiencescater to various customer segments and added a wide range of cuisines to their dine-in optionsincluded a wide range of cuisines in their dine-in options. If cinemas cease to exist, movie lovers would be deprived of such an immersive experience. Moreover, watching movies in a theatre is more than enjoying a movie, it is a great way of socialising. For exampleTo give an example, whenever I watch a movie with my friends, it is more enjoyable due to the social interaction and enjoyment it offers. In conclusion, despite the convenience the smart devices provide for movie-watchers, I strongly believe that theatres remainstill remain an important option, especially for moviegoers who prefer experience over conveniencemovie-goers, who prefer experience over convenience.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay’s strongest feature is its clear, well-supported preference for cinemas while still explaining the convenience, affordability, and wider content available on smart devices. Its main limitation is organisation: the entire response is presented as one uninterrupted paragraph, and several otherwise ambitious phrases contain collocational or grammatical slips. Prioritise separating the introduction, two views, and conclusion into paragraphs, then proofreading comparisons and cinema-related noun phrases.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are fully explored with relevant explanations and examples, and the preference for cinemas is explicit and consistently maintained.
Sharpen the final judgement by stating which kinds of films particularly benefit from the cinema experience and why.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a logical sequence with clear contrasting markers, but the absence of paragraph breaks substantially weakens presentation and progression.
Create separate paragraphs for the introduction, home-viewing case, cinema case, and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The essay uses a broad and generally effective range for technology and cinema, with occasional awkward combinations such as ‘millions of content’ and ‘surrounding sound system’.
Use precise forms such as ‘a vast range of content’, ‘surround-sound system’, and ‘cinema operators’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex sentences is mostly well controlled, though article, number, modifier, and comma-splice errors occur occasionally.
Correct the comma splice in ‘watching movies in a theatre is more than enjoying a movie, it is…’ and review singular–plural agreement.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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