A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child’s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Sample Response
During first few years of life, children are greatly influenced by their surroundings, attitude or parents and things they play with. During development ages for a child, his/her mental capabilities and physical growth relies on the way s/he utilises it. In my opinion, sports-related giftssports related gifts will be important for children as they would help them develop an interest in sportshelp them to grow their interest in sports and that might bring out potential sporting talentspotential talents they might have on sports. In terms of relationshiprelation building, gifts are always helpful.
Before decidingtaking the decision to present something to children, one must consider the age, likes and dislikesliking and disliking, health hazards, durability and cost of a gift. Children love to play physical sports and enjoy the experience of spending time with their loved onestaste of contact with their beloved ones. By playing football, kidsBy playing football kids will develop their musclesget their muscles developed. It will increase their stamina for walking and running. By playing with children of the same agechildren of same age group, they will get these sweet memories imprinted in their mindsmind. From these senses, giving sports equipmentmaterials to kids has many benefits. Similarly, kids like to explore new things and thus grow their interest. A gift like a camera might bring out a future photographera potential photographer for the future.
Sometimes wrong choices of gifts can cause physical injuries and in some other cases, kids might not use it due to lack of interest in that particular object. Few people present very costly stuff to the growing age group and they don’t appreciate these valuables, simply they misuse it and there will be a waste of money.
Giving a small bird or a pet would help children connect with animalshelp them to get close to them and thus it would help them to develop a better understanding of the world and other creatures. Sometimes they need to take care of their petsrequire taking care of their pets and they learn this valuable life skillthis great quality of life. Personally, I would like to give a pet to a child as it would help them in many ways including knowing about this species, getting closer to that pet, taking care of it, and exploring many new activities that would help them better develop as a human.
In short, every incidentincidence, contact and story produce some impacts on the personality of a growing child. So the choice of gifts must be very meticulous and useful. Sports item are by and large harmless and produce positive effects in human development while a pet as a gift can help them explore new things and learn how to take care of others.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay offers relevant ideas about how sports equipment, cameras, and pets can support physical, creative, and emotional development, with the pet section providing the clearest personal choice. Its main limitation is that the response initially recommends sports gifts and spends substantial space on alternatives before choosing a pet, so the central answer lacks focus; frequent awkward phrasing also reduces clarity. The priority is to select one gift from the outset and develop two precise benefits with examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response supplies several relevant developmental benefits, but the chosen gift shifts from sports equipment to a pet and much of the discussion is not focused on the final choice.
Name one gift in the introduction and develop two specific ways it would help a child, supported by a concrete example for each.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses clear paragraphs and generally logical sequencing, but movement among sports, cameras, unsuitable gifts, and pets weakens overall unity.
Remove alternative-gift sections and organise the body around two distinct benefits of the single selected gift.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for development, play, safety, and responsibility, but many word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural.
Use natural phrases such as 'develop an interest in sport', 'build physical strength', 'choose an age-appropriate gift', and 'learn responsibility'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied structures, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, pronoun reference, plurals, and clause construction reduce accuracy.
Maintain consistent singular or plural references to the child and check subject-verb agreement throughout each paragraph.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child’s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
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