All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty?
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The gap between the rich and the poor is widening fasterfast than ever throughout the world. This enormous gap certainly causes many problemsa lot of problems that a nation must solvemust endure solving through targeted measuresthrough various means. This essay discusses the problems associated with povertypaucity and proposes some solutions to alleviate poverty. There is an almost endless listalmost an endless list of problems that stem from poverty. To name a few, scarcity of food, water, and clothing, weak shelters, the spread of dangerous diseases, indulgence in criminal activities, mental illness and low life expectancy. Poor people are trapped in severe deprivationhorrendous insufficiency and cannot educate their children. The root cause of poverty is the lack of proper education and hence problems related to employment. This creates an vicious cycleevil circle of scarcity for poor families that they can not break. Moreover, poverty increases crimecrimes in an area and this disturbs social harmony. Where the poor are struggling even harder to meet their basic needsmeans, the rich are enjoying wealth and luxuryare getting pampered by the wealth and luxury. This discrimination can even lead to civil war. In order to overcome the problems of poverty, governments should conduct a careful and thorough analysisdo a careful and considerable analysis of the distribution of financial resourcesfunds and wealth throughout the country. Non-profit voluntary organisations should work actively in rural areas to improve the lives of poor peoplefor the upliftment of the poor, mainly in education and skills developmenteducation and skill development areas. Furthermore, wealthy peoplethe rich and the prosperous should contribute financially and work selflessly towards creating job opportunities and helping destitute people. To conclude, the world would be a better place to live in only if we prevent poverty from worseningkeep poverty from rising beyond limits. Poverty is a curse and a collaborative effort, education and employment opportunity can mitigate it to a great extent.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response directly addresses both parts of the task and presents a clear, logically organised set of problems and remedies, with a particularly effective explanation of the poverty-education-employment cycle. Its main limitation is that several claims and solutions remain general or briefly listed, while recurring grammatical and collocational slips reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop each proposed remedy with a clearer mechanism or concrete example while proofreading sentence structures and word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are answered clearly, and the main problems and solutions are relevant, though some points remain general or only briefly supported.
Explain how the proposed funding, education, and employment measures would operate and illustrate at least one with a concrete example.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from the effects of poverty to possible remedies, with clear overall paragraphing and generally effective linking.
Divide the long discussion of problems into more focused idea units and use referencing to connect supporting details more smoothly.
Lexical Resource
A broad vocabulary conveys the topic effectively, although several combinations such as 'evil circle' and 'meet their basic means' are unnatural.
Prioritise accurate collocations and natural word choice when using less common vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures, but recurring errors in comparison, sentence construction, and agreement reduce accuracy without obscuring meaning.
Proofread complex sentences for complete clause structure, correct comparative forms, and subject-verb agreement.