The media should include more stories which report good news. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Sample Response
In recent years, debates about the role of mass mediaarguments over mass media have mushroomed in many parts of the world. While I am convinced that good news should be disseminated widely as a sourceresource of inspiration and motivation, I believe unfortunate incidents must also be coveredare also essential to cover on such channels to prevent people from unduly immersing themselves in overly naive and optimistic worldviews.
On the one hand, it is essential to know that reports featuringdelivering meaningful and motivating stories are believed to boost people's productivityhumans’ productivity and thus deserve considerable media coverage. Specifically, people with outstanding achievements on their career paths appeal to journalists as role models for others to imitate. Such reports encourage people to leavebreak their comfort zones and pursue their ambitions, which contributesattributes significantly to their success. Moreover, positive actionsmeaningful things should be reported to promote benevolence around the world. If community work, ranging from collecting litter, donating to charity, and rescuing and adopting abandoned animalscollecting garbage and doing charity to rescue and adopt abandoned animals, is publicisedspread and valued, modern humanity will be enhanced, especially in a competitive society.
On the other hand, because the media’s role is to provide an overview of both the dark and bright sides of societyoverview of society, on both dark and bright sides, negative stories must be reportedbad stories are essential to be disseminated to awaken people to reality, which is full of severe hardships and dangers. Indeed, information about global issuesthe information about global issues, infectious diseases, and notorious criminals enables people to equip themselves with essential skills and knowledge to respond to them effectivelydeal with them actively and successfully. Conversely, the lack of preparation and alertness can lead to a negative outcomea pessimistic scenario when people make light of those problems, resultingmake light of those problems, which results in unforeseeable consequences. Take the Covid-19 pandemic as an example. Although broadcasting the number of deaths and new cases frightens people and makes them feel suspicious about authorities’ ability, this news can act as a warning that requires people to obey the government’s strict rules contributing to the fight’s success against the lethal pandemic.
In conclusion, the media keeps people posted on their real lives and the world’s development, which is a precondition to brighten their prosperity. Therefore, both positive and negative newseither positive or negative news should be reported to help this industry function effectively.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response presents a clear, nuanced position and develops both the motivational value of positive reporting and the practical need for negative news with relevant explanation. Its main limitation is that several claims are expressed through awkward collocations and a few imprecise causal links, which occasionally blur otherwise sophisticated ideas. Prioritise more natural word combinations and tighter sentence-level logic while retaining the strong balanced argument.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout, and both positive and negative reporting are explored through relevant, well-developed reasons and examples.
Sharpen the final justification by stating more directly why a balanced news agenda serves the public better than predominantly positive coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with generally effective cohesive control.
Tighten a few long causal chains so that each sentence advances one clearly defined relationship between evidence and claim.
Lexical Resource
A wide vocabulary conveys abstract arguments effectively, although several ambitious collocations sound unnatural or imprecise.
Prefer established combinations such as leaving one's comfort zone and contributing to success over less natural verb-noun pairings.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with strong overall control, despite occasional faulty reference, parallelism, and clause attachment.
Check the grammatical subject of relative clauses and keep coordinated verb forms parallel when listing actions or consequences.