Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies.
Sample Response
Instead of being conducted by private companies, important scientific research must be managed and administered by the governments, according to the opinions of many. I personally believe that private companies should be allowed to conduct researchgiven their own freedom in doing research, but with sufficient and proper monitoring from the government. On the one handOn one hand, it is true that scientific research should not be conducted onlyshould not be only conducted by the government. The main reason is that the scope of scientific research is broad and diversediverse and wide, and private companies could undertake some researchcover up some research which is not carried out by the governments. Many discoveries by private institutions or individualsprivate institutions or individuals' discoveries are useful for humanityfor the humanity, as we can learn from the past. For example, Thomas Alva Edison was an inventoran individual inventor who has greatly contributed to the world with his inventions such as the light bulbthe bulb light, motion pictures, phonograph and so on. We should notice that the invention was not the main focus of the government’s research during that time, and thanks to Edison we have electric light today. On the other hand, although private companies are given the right to do scientific research, they must be strictly monitored by the governments. They must be controlled, as some of them might be doing it for their monetary gain or for destructive weapons. For example, some companies might focus on developing biochemical weapons, whichbiochemical weapons, and it could threaten world peacethe world peace. It is the responsibility of governmentsthe governments’ job to prevent and block this kind of researchthese kinds of research. In conclusion, I do not agree that scientific research should only be conducted by the governments. It is a fact that the scope of scientific research is huge. Therefore, privateTherefore private companies should be allowed to conduct researchallowed in doing research. However, I do agree thatthe research that is done by private companies must be reviewed and monitoredreviewed, and monitored by the governments in order to avoid any misusemisappropriation.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, consistent position and supports it with two relevant lines of argument that progress logically. Its main limitation is that the examples remain somewhat general, and the Edison example concerns an individual rather than a private company, reducing its precision. The highest-priority improvement is to develop each claim with more directly relevant reasoning while replacing awkward collocations with natural academic phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the issue directly, maintains a clear qualified position, and develops relevant reasons with supporting examples.
Develop the examples more precisely by explaining how private-company research, rather than individual invention, supports the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are logically sequenced across clear paragraphs, with effective overall progression despite some mechanical signposting and repetition.
Use less formulaic transitions and strengthen the links between each example and the central claim.
Lexical Resource
The response shows sufficient range for the topic, but several awkward or inaccurate collocations reduce lexical precision.
Replace expressions such as “cover up some research,” “bulb light,” and “allowed in doing research” with natural academic alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, though article, preposition, agreement, and punctuation errors recur.
Improve control of articles and prepositional patterns, especially with references to government, humanity, and permission to conduct research.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies.
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