We never know when the natural disaster will shatter an area and that is why the government should take every precaution to protect its citizens from natural disaster. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
In today’s worldtoday’s modern world, we are constantly confronted by natural disasters occurringbombarded with the issue of natural disasters happening around the globe. Thus, some people assert that preventing the occurrence of natural disasters is merely the responsibility of the governmentresponsibility of government as they believe they can do nothing to prevent themdo nothing in preventing it from happening. Nevertheless, I think that cooperation between citizens and the governmentbetween people and government is essential forin protecting citizens from natural disasters.
Undoubtedly, a government has the greatest responsibilitylargest obligation to take practical measurestake the practical measures to prevent natural disasters from happening. They can, for example, employ scientists and geologistsemploy those scientists and geologists to predict the timing of disastersthe time of occurrence of disasters. By knowing when there will be a natural disaster, the government can then take effective preventive measurestake the effective prevention to mitigate the potentially dangerous effects on human lives. To illustrate, to tackle the threat of a tsunamithe problem of the tsunami which may cause the death of inhabitants, the government should allocate a portion of the money to improve the current drainage system and to build barriers near the coastnear the sea-coast. Thus, it is apparent that government has more power to reduce the likelihood of natural disasters and their effects on citizenslower the potential risks of natural disasters from happening and its effects on the citizens.
However, this does not meanit is not to say that citizens have no responsibility to protect themselves from natural disasters. They can take limited but potentially useful measurestake little but could prove useful ways in dealing with this problem. For instance, parents should educate their children from a young ageeducate their children from young to behave well by not simply throwing rubbish into the drains and rivers which may eventually cause blockage. This kind of actionThis kind act can be usefulis proved to be useful in preventing natural disasters like flooding. In addition, they should also take part in a campaign that provides information about what citizens can dowhich gives information of what can be done by citizens in order to minimise the negative impacts of natural disasters on human beings. Although there are limited actions that an individual can take in dealing with this problem, the possible negative impacts on humans can still be reduced if every citizen plays their own part.
In conclusion, it is the responsibility of both government and individuals to mitigate the unanticipated impacts of natural disasters on human beings. I believe our nation will continue to prosper and flourish in the years to come and the citizens can be free from disasters.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear, balanced position that gives government the leading role while explaining how citizens can contribute, and its paragraphing supports an easy-to-follow argument. Its main limitation is imprecise development: some proposed measures do not clearly match the named disaster, and frequent awkward collocations weaken otherwise relevant ideas. Use more technically credible examples and edit each claim for precise cause-and-effect wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers the question with a consistent qualified position and develops relevant responsibilities for both government and citizens, despite some questionable examples.
Match each precaution to a specific hazard and explain clearly how it would reduce either the likelihood or impact of that disaster.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses logically through government and individual roles, with clear paragraphing, although linking is sometimes mechanical and a few internal connections are imprecise.
Let topic sentences establish each paragraph's logic and use fewer formulaic transitions where the relationship between ideas is already clear.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of disaster-related vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations such as 'take the effective prevention' reduce precision and naturalness.
Use standard combinations such as 'take preventive measures,' 'reduce the risk,' 'issue warnings,' and 'mitigate the effects of a disaster.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts a variety of complex structures, but recurring errors with articles, agreement, pronouns, and clause construction limit grammatical control.
Check every complex sentence for a clear subject and verb, then proofread articles and singular-plural agreement before finalising it.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
We never know when the natural disaster will shatter an area and that is why the government should take every precaution to protect its citizens from natural disaster. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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