To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to learn the past? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?
Sample Response
Learning the history might not have any or little importance for some people in these days, but, the history and past can’t be ignored. The present is built on the pillars of past and only learning from the past can give us right direction for the future. In my point of view, something that happened in the past, need to be learned to go ahead with the right decisions. If the new generations are not taught history, they will not have any respect towards the past struggle or glory of the country and thus they won’t become the citizens we want them to be.
Learning the past is the knowledge we require to learn about the right and wrong. This gives us the opportunity to take the right decision for the future. If someone does not learn the past history, he will never have any respect for the country, humanity and towards the world. He will simply become a selfish citizen who won’t even respect the rich tradition of a country. To his everything would be like an automated and programmed system. Through history learning, children should be introduced to their country, culture, and tradition. This is hoped to become a first step to building a soul of nationality in students themselves. If children do not know the history of their country, they will have no idea how to build the nation. For example, if children grow up without learning the past of their country and become a future policy maker, they will never realize the need of their country and won’t be able to take a right decision.
Secondly, students who learn about history will understand how their ancestors survived to get the independence of their country. So, from this understanding, children may have a good motivation to develop their ability in order to contribute to the building of their country; physically and mentality. Students without this ability usually will have a lack of contribution to their nation. For instance, the children who live in another country for a long time and do not learn about Indonesian history will tend to never come back to build Indonesia, even though Indonesian society needs their contribution.
In conclusion, based on reasons mentioned above, history learning is needed by students to build their nationality and motivate them to contribute to their country. Learning the past is the first step to building a better future.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix paired alternative Original: might not have any or little importance Suggested revision: might have little or no importance Why it matters: Use the conventional paired structure “little or no” rather than combining “any” with “or.”
- 2. Use natural time phrase Original: in these days Suggested revision: these days Why it matters: The idiomatic time expression does not take “in.”
- 3. Remove comma Original: but, the history Suggested revision: but history Why it matters: A comma should not separate the conjunction from the noun phrase it introduces.
- 4. Add article Original: pillars of past Suggested revision: pillars of the past Why it matters: The fixed noun phrase requires the definite article.
- 5. Add article Original: give us right direction Suggested revision: give us the right direction Why it matters: The singular count noun “direction” needs a determiner here.
- 6. Correct viewpoint phrase Original: In Suggested revision: From Why it matters: The standard expression begins with “from,” not “in.”
- 7. Fix agreement and comma Original: something that happened in the past, need Suggested revision: events that happened in the past need Why it matters: The plural noun and verb agree, and no comma should separate the subject from its verb.
- 8. Use natural collocation Original: respect towards the past struggle Suggested revision: respect for their country's past struggles Why it matters: “Respect for” and plural “struggles” express the intended idea more naturally.
- 9. Use decision collocation Original: take Suggested revision: make Why it matters: English normally uses “make a decision,” not “take a decision,” in this context.
- 10. Remove wrong preposition Original: towards the world Suggested revision: the world Why it matters: “Respect” can take this object directly within the existing coordinated list.
- 11. Fix pronoun form Original: To his everything Suggested revision: To him, everything Why it matters: The preposition requires the object pronoun “him,” followed by a comma after the introductory phrase.
- 12. Use natural phrase Original: Through history learning Suggested revision: By learning history Why it matters: This gerund construction expresses the means more naturally.
Suggested Rewrites
- might not have any or little importance might have little or no importance
- in these days these days
- but, the history but history
- pillars of past pillars of the past
- give us right direction give us the right direction
- In From
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly recognizes both why history matters and what children may lose without it, and it sustains a consistent emphasis on national identity and civic contribution. However, the argument repeatedly circles around the same claim, relies on sweeping assumptions, and contains frequent awkward or inaccurate language. The highest priority is to develop two distinct, well-supported consequences with specific reasoning while editing sentence structure and word choice for precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are answered through relevant ideas about decision-making, national identity, and civic contribution, but the development is repetitive and sometimes overgeneralized.
Develop separate, specific explanations of one benefit of learning history and one realistic consequence of not teaching it, rather than repeatedly asserting a loss of patriotism.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognizable introduction, body, and conclusion with broadly logical progression, although ideas within the long first body paragraph overlap and repeat.
Give each body paragraph one distinct controlling idea and arrange explanation, consequence, and example in a clear sequence.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to discuss history, culture, nationality, and contribution, but inaccurate word forms and unnatural collocations occur frequently.
Use precise combinations such as learn from history, make informed decisions, develop a sense of national identity, and contribute physically and mentally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, pronouns, verb forms, and clause construction reduce accuracy and fluency.
Edit each sentence for a clear subject and finite verb, then check singular-plural agreement, articles, and pronoun case.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to learn the past? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?
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