To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to learn the past? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?
Sample Response
Learning the history might have little or no importancemight not have any or little importance for some people these daysin these days, but historybut, the history and past can’t be ignored. The present is built on the pillars of the pastpillars of past and only learning from the past can give us the right directiongive us right direction for the future. FromIn my point of view, events that happened in the past needsomething that happened in the past, need to be learned to go ahead with the right decisions. If the new generations are not taught history, they will not have any respect for their country's past strugglesrespect towards the past struggle or glory of the country and thus they won’t become the citizens we want them to be.
Learning the past is the knowledge we require to learn about the right and wrong. This gives us the opportunity to maketake the right decision for the future. If someone does not learn the past history, he will never have any respect for the country, humanity and the worldtowards the world. He will simply become a selfish citizen who won’t even respect the rich tradition of a country. To him, everythingTo his everything would be like an automated and programmed system. By learning historyThrough history learning, children should be introduced to their country, culture, and tradition. This could becomeThis is hoped to become a first step to building a sense of national identitysoul of nationality in students themselves. If children do not know the history of their country, they will have no idea how to build the nation. For example, if children grow up without learning the past of their country and become a future policy maker, they will never understand their country's needsrealize the need of their country and won’t be able to take a right decision.
Secondly, students who learn about history will understand how their ancestors struggled to gain independencesurvived to get the independence of their country. So, from this understanding, children may have a good motivation to develop their ability in order to contribute to the building of their country; physically and mentallymentality. Students without this ability will usually contribute littleusually will have a lack of contribution to their nation. For instance, the children who live in another country for a long time and do not learn about Indonesian history will tend to never come back to build Indonesia, even though Indonesian society needs their contribution.
In conclusion, based on the reasons mentioned abovebased on reasons mentioned above, history learning is needed by students to build their nationality and motivate them to contribute to their country. Learning the past is the first step to building a better future.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly recognizes both why history matters and what children may lose without it, and it sustains a consistent emphasis on national identity and civic contribution. However, the argument repeatedly circles around the same claim, relies on sweeping assumptions, and contains frequent awkward or inaccurate language. The highest priority is to develop two distinct, well-supported consequences with specific reasoning while editing sentence structure and word choice for precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are answered through relevant ideas about decision-making, national identity, and civic contribution, but the development is repetitive and sometimes overgeneralized.
Develop separate, specific explanations of one benefit of learning history and one realistic consequence of not teaching it, rather than repeatedly asserting a loss of patriotism.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognizable introduction, body, and conclusion with broadly logical progression, although ideas within the long first body paragraph overlap and repeat.
Give each body paragraph one distinct controlling idea and arrange explanation, consequence, and example in a clear sequence.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to discuss history, culture, nationality, and contribution, but inaccurate word forms and unnatural collocations occur frequently.
Use precise combinations such as learn from history, make informed decisions, develop a sense of national identity, and contribute physically and mentally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, pronouns, verb forms, and clause construction reduce accuracy and fluency.
Edit each sentence for a clear subject and finite verb, then check singular-plural agreement, articles, and pronoun case.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to learn the past? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?
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