To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to learn the past? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?
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Some people give little credit and value of studying history as it is petty and in their opinion does not have any importance in the modern society. Other people,on the contrary, reckon that the past has an important roleprominent roles in understanding our modern life and makingtaking important decisions for the future. So in this essay, I will consider both points of views and state my own assertion on the matter and discuss the consequencesfollowed by the consequences if we do not teach history to our children.
In the modern world, it cannot be denied that examining the past could be unbelievably valuable in terms of understanding problems in the modern worldin terms of understanding of our modern world problems. There is a saying that suggests that "history repeats itself", for this reason, if we delve into history, examine it without leaving any detail behind, we will have more opportunities to anticipate forthcoming problems and it is undeniable that problems would be solved very easily. Human conflicts, inventions and socialsocials issues throughout historyin all the ages are quite similar and this is what makes the study of the pastthe study of past so important. Without studying the past, weWithout studying the past we cannot understand why a certain civilization flourished while others did notflourished among others and why nations were destroyed. This knowledge can give us such wisdomsuch a wisdom that would help us progress further.
History is of great importancehas a great importance in our lives, in spite of the fact that there are people who think the past is useless and there is no point in studying history. However, it is undoubtedly true that a clear futurean explicit future awaits those who have delved into historythe one who has delved into history. Thus, teaching history to childrenThus teaching history to the children needs to be considered comprehensively. Because if children are not taught history, there will be consequences. For instance, a lack of knowledge about their country’s pastlack of knowledge of the past of their country would have tragic consequences for societya tragic outcome in the society.
To conclude, studying and examining the past is of fundamental valuehas a fundamental value in the modern world and it is undeniable that the effects of not teaching children historythe effects of the children who are not taught history would be more catastrophic than anyone could imagine.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response explains the value of historical study with a clear central idea and several relevant references to recurring conflicts and the rise and fall of civilizations. However, the second required question is answered only through vague claims about tragic social consequences, so the task is unevenly developed. The priority is to explain specific effects on children or society and support each one with a clear causal example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The importance of history is developed adequately, but the effects of not teaching it are asserted rather than explained.
Develop two specific consequences for children or society and show clearly how a lack of historical knowledge causes them.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraph sequence is recognizable and the main argument progresses, although repetition and faulty sentence linking weaken flow.
Give the consequences paragraph a clear controlling idea and connect each supporting sentence directly to it.
Lexical Resource
The response shows sufficient range for the topic, but recurrent imprecise and unnatural word combinations limit clarity.
Replace expressions such as explicit future and effects of the children with conventional, exact wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms conveys the message, though article, agreement, punctuation, and sentence-boundary errors recur.
Revise run-on sentences and fragments, then check articles and noun forms systematically.