The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the Internet? What solutions can you suggest?
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Many people believe that the Internet is the reason for many severe problems in society despite its numerous benefits. This essay will discuss some major problems of Internet useusages and some of the solutions to themsolutions to resolve them. DeleteFor several reasons, the worldwide use of the Internet is the root cause of several serious issues. Firstly, it provides access to many inappropriate contents to its users, including children. As a result, many teenagers are addicted to obscene and violent contentaddicted to obscenity and violence which have affectedwhich has impacted their psychological growth and academic performance. Secondly, it has diminished real-life communication among family members, friends and relativescommunication between families, friends and relatives. With the widespread use ofWith the existence of smartphones and tablets, social networking platforms and an active internet connection, people stay online for several hours a day. Consequently, they are less interested in having face-to-face conversations with others. To resolve the first issue, parents should monitor children's online activities. They should check their children's devices and advise them about the serious consequenceseffects of accessing unsuitable content. Parents could also configure security settingsmake a security setting for their home internet connectionsetting, so that inappropriate websites are blockedwhereas inappropriate websites will be blocked. As for the second issue, it requires the commitment of individuals and family members. For example, as parents need to lead by example, they should set examples by using gadgets for a certain period of time each day. Family members should not be allowed to bringshould be disallowed to bring their devices to mealtimesduring mealtime; therefore, there will be, therefore there will be plenty of time for verbal interactions between them. In conclusion, the Internet has indeed brought some serious issues for many communities despite the benefits it has brought to the worldthe marvel it has brought for the world. To address those issues, we have to be more proactive and awaremore active and conscious, act responsibly as members of families and societyact as family and society members while also monitoringmonitor our younger members' online activitiesyounger members online activities.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response's main strength is its direct coverage of both parts of the task, with two identifiable problems paired with relevant solutions. The principal weakness is presentation within a single dense paragraph, compounded by recurring awkward collocations and grammatical slips. The highest-priority improvement is to separate the problem-solution pairs into clear paragraphs and edit each sentence for accurate clause linking, agreement, and word choice.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are answered directly through two relevant problems and corresponding practical solutions that receive adequate explanation.
Develop the broader social impact of each problem and explain more fully why the proposed measures would be effective.
Coherence and Cohesion
The problem-solution sequence is logically traceable, but the single-paragraph presentation and some mechanical linking weaken organisation.
Use separate introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with one clearly developed problem-solution pair in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough range for the topic, though several inaccurate collocations and plural forms reduce naturalness.
Use precise combinations such as internet use, inappropriate content, and parental controls, and remove repetitive wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence forms, but recurring agreement, punctuation, article, and clause-linking errors limit control.
Check each complex sentence for a clear main clause, correct agreement, and properly joined dependent clauses.