The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the Internet? What solutions can you suggest?

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Sample Response

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The Internet is a revolutionary technology and it has changed the way people work, interact with each other and exchangeinterchange information. But its negative consequencesthe negative consequences of it can not be overlooked and these problems stem mostly from the overuse and over-reliance on this technology. In this essay, the main problems associated with Internet use and possible solutionsmain problems of Internet technology with possible solutions will be discussed. To begin withTo commence with the problems, widespread use of the Internet is related to new and innovative devices like smartphones and computers, and we replace those devices more frequently than ever. Thus, weThus we are creating a throwaway society and contributing to the production of additionalmore hazardous waste every day. Furthermore, social media, online games, and chat roomssocial media, online games, chat rooms are contributing to digital addictionaddictions among many teenagers. Apathy, for instance, is one of the most severe consequences of overreliance on the Internet and this discourages peoplethat obstructs people from participating in social activities. Besides, people are becoming less active, both socially and physically, due to increased screen time. As a result, our health is deterioratingour health condition is deteriorating and our social life is in jeopardy. Finally, our privacy is under threatprivacy is hanging on an edge and our security is at risk due to our heavy dependence on the Internetextensive dependency on the Internet. Having outlined these problemsAfter investigating the causes of the problems, it will be easier to offer solutions. First, parents should encourage their children to take part in outdoor activities and restrictoutdoor activities, and restrict their screen time. Second, we should buy new electronic devices only when doing so is absolutely necessarywhen this is absolutely necessary. Moreover, the use of the Internet in schools and workplaces should be monitored. The young generation should be encouraged to get involved in social activities and take part in charitable worktake charity works. Finally, we should make our Internet access more secure and follow standard security protocolsthe standard security protocol so that hackers and intruders cannot obtainaccess and gain our personal information such as passwords or credit card detailsinformation like passwords or credit card information. In conclusion, even though our society is becoming more dependent on the Internet and that can bring severe negative results, we have the solutions to mitigate these problems and enjoy the benefits this technology offersthe good side this technology offers us.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response's strongest feature is its broad, relevant coverage of both questions, linking electronic waste, digital addiction, inactivity, and privacy risks to practical solutions. Its main limitation is organisational: the entire discussion appears as one dense block and relies on a succession of listing signals, while some problem-solution links remain brief. The highest priority is to divide the essay into focused paragraphs and explicitly pair each major problem with its most effective remedy.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.5
Scoring rule

Several main Internet-related problems and corresponding solutions are directly addressed, relevant, and sufficiently explained.

Next step

Prioritise two or three central problems and show more explicitly why each proposed measure would reduce that particular harm.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The response has a clear overall movement from problems to solutions, but the single-block format and repeated listing markers weaken cohesion and readability.

Next step

Use separate paragraphs for environmental waste, social and health harms, privacy risks, and a matched set of solutions.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

There is a good range of topic vocabulary, but recurring unnatural collocations reduce precision in otherwise clear ideas.

Next step

Use natural phrases such as exchange information, privacy is at risk, participate in charity work, and obtain personal information.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

A range of complex structures is generally controlled, although punctuation, article use, list construction, and occasional clause links contain errors.

Next step

Check comma use in lists and ensure each long sentence has clearly connected independent and dependent clauses.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the Internet? What solutions can you suggest?

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