It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.). There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Some people today argueSome today argue that humanity should not interfere with the extinction of other species. In my opinion, this was a more legitimate argument in the past, when mankind was not the primary driving force behind this phenomenon.
Throughout history, extinction has been part of natural selection and evolution. Creatures such as the dinosaurs disappeared due to a likely cataclysmic event, but in recent historyin more recent history, less adaptable species have also gone extinct. Humanity, in these cases, played either no role or a role comparable to other natural forcesone commensurate with the rest of nature. This can be seen as part of natural processesnecessary to the work of nature. Certain species develop and prosper, while othersother ones do not and perish. A modern, compassionate public might view this as inhumane, but the nature’s indifferenceindifferent cruelty in nature has served the historical rolehistoric purpose of maintaining a healthy, thriving, and diverse ecosystem.
However, contemporary human dominance must be accompanied by greater responsibilitya larger share of responsibility. Mankind is no longer one animal among many, but the dominant species whose actions affect most other speciesthe majority of other animals. The most pertinent examples of this relate to deforestation and climate change. In order to sustain booming populations, production has stripped bare sections of the earth, decimating natural habitats and plunging thousands of species to the brink of extinction. The causal role of human industry necessitates taking responsibility. Moreover, there are simple steps that could be taken to preserve species and curb the effects of human activityprogress. If countries collectively committed to moderate conservation efforts, then the earth could be restored to a more natural equilibrium.
In conclusion, though humanity was not at fault for past extinctions, the current influence of industry means that we should now take responsibility for biological diversity. Once a species disappears, it will never return.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response’s strongest feature is its mature, clearly sustained position, supported by a persuasive distinction between natural historical extinction and modern human-caused losses. Its main limitation is that some claims about ecological balance and conservation remain broad rather than concretely substantiated. The highest-priority improvement is to add a specific contemporary example showing how a practical conservation measure can counter a demonstrably human-driven extinction threat.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response fully addresses the proposition through a clear, nuanced position and well-developed reasoning about natural and human-driven extinction.
Strengthen the argument further with one precise real-world example of a human-caused threat and an effective conservation response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from historical context to modern responsibility, with clear paragraphing and well-managed cohesive links.
Make the transition from human responsibility to proposed conservation action slightly more explicit to sharpen the final stage of the argument.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide-ranging, precise, and natural overall, with effective choices such as ‘commensurate,’ ‘decimating,’ and ‘equilibrium.’
Refine the few less natural expressions, such as ‘the work of nature’ and ‘other ones,’ to achieve consistently idiomatic precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used accurately and flexibly, with strong control of subordination and punctuation.
Continue varying sentence openings and clause patterns while preserving the same high level of grammatical accuracy.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.). There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?
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