It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Some would argue that certain fields, such as sport or music, aresuch as sport or music are meant only for naturally talented children, while others believe that these are skills thatit is something which can be learned by anyone. While childrenkids with the aptitude for certain skills are given a head start in life, this essay argues that such skill sets can be mastered through sustained effortmastered by working hard.
On the one hand, children who are gifted with a particular inborn talent often achieve their goalsgoal early in their lives. This is because when someone is very good at what they are doing, it usually does not take much effort for them to strive for excellence in that specific area. For instance, there are many talented singers who have already established a successful singing career before they even become teenagers. However, I believe that talent alone does not guarantee success in the long runin the long-run, and that a person can only reach the highest level in their profession if they combine their innate ability with hard work.
On the other hand, many people think that anything is achievable in this life through practice and training. That is to say that it may take extra time and energy for an individual with average potential to developharness a skill, but success is possible as long as one has the will, determination and passionand the passion to work for it. For example, the world is filled with many star athletes who start off at a mediocre levelas a mediocre in the beginning, but they challenge and push themselves to their limitslimit, which ultimately helpshelp them to reach their full potentialattain the greatest version of themselves. I believe this perspective is more realisticthis view point is more practical because the majority of peoplebecause majority of the people are born average, and hard work beats talent in many cases.
In conclusion, although it is easier for children with extraordinary ability to accomplish their dreams at the beginning of their lives, this essay finds that thesehard skills, even though time-consuming to mastertime taking to master, can be developed through coaching and experiencecan be earned by coaching and experience.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay clearly discusses both perspectives, sustains its preference for effort and training, and develops each side through relevant explanation and examples. Logical paragraphing and a broad vocabulary are strengths, while recurring imprecise collocations and grammatical agreement errors reduce polish. The highest-priority improvement is to refine word choice and proofread complex sentences so that strong ideas are expressed with consistently natural, accurate language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed with a clear opinion throughout, and the main ideas are relevant and developed, though the examples and final phrasing are somewhat general.
Develop the examples with more specific causal detail and ensure the conclusion precisely restates the claim about trainable abilities.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organised into clear paragraphs, with effective progression and generally appropriate linking despite some formulaic transitions and loose references.
Use more precise referencing between sentences and vary transitions so that connections arise naturally from the reasoning.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and includes effective less common items, although several collocations and forms are imprecise or unnatural.
Refine combinations such as start off as a mediocre and greatest version of themselves, and check compound forms such as viewpoint.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is used successfully, but recurring agreement, article, number, and pronoun errors prevent consistently accurate control.
Proofread complex sentences for subject-verb agreement, article use, and singular-plural consistency before finalising the response.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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