It is often stated that newspapers have a great influence in our opinions and ideas. Does this influence have more positive or negative outcome?
Sample Response
In today's world, the newspaper has become an important source of information. We are capable of knowing the activities around the world simply by reading a newspaper. As we can rely on it for all the information, it has have impacted our thoughts to some extent. The influence of newspaper on our lives has both negative and positive aspects.
The most important advantage that we get from the newspaper is information from around the world. For instance, the information related to any scientific discovery, medical research, etc. Knowing all about such things will keep us updated and also help to develop our mind. Also, nowadays, newspapers contain a separate section for discussion or articles of different writers on different topics which could be related to sports, politics, health, etc. We can also find articles related to improving our health, maintaining a healthy relationship with people, interior designing and so on. Articles like those are essential in our daily life. We can not only entertain ourselves by reading them but can also use the tips to improve our own lifestyle. Not all of us have the idea of maintaining good health and decorating houses. Thus, reading those articles guides them towards better health and a beautiful home. Furthermore, there are articles related to children as well poems, stories, etc. Reading those articles will develop a reading habit in children and it will also help in their brain development.
As every coin has two sides, the newspaper also has some negative impact on people' mind. Some newspapers tend to broadcast false news just for fame and money which brings unnecessary chaos in the country. Some newspapers even have abusive content or pornographic posts. This seriously brings negative impact on children and sometimes even on adults. It has been seen that people get ideas on committing crimes by reading about the crime posts or murder cases on newspaper.
To conclude, the newspaper has both the negative and the positive influence on people. So, necessary actions should be taken by the respective authority before printing anything on newspaper. This way, we can control the negative impact of newspaper on people.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Clearer wording Original: it has have impacted Suggested revision: it has influenced Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 2. Grammar fix Original: influence of newspaper Suggested revision: influence of newspapers Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 3. Clearer wording Original: both negative and positive aspects Suggested revision: both positive and negative effects, but the negative influence is greater Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 4. Clearer wording Original: For instance, the information related Suggested revision: For instance, they report information related Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 5. Clearer wording Original: develop our mind Suggested revision: develop our minds Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 6. Grammar fix Original: a separate section for discussion or articles Suggested revision: separate sections containing commentary and articles Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 7. Clearer wording Original: interior designing Suggested revision: interior design Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 8. Clearer wording Original: have the idea of maintaining good health Suggested revision: know how to maintain good health Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 9. Clearer wording Original: guides them Suggested revision: can guide readers Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 10. Grammar fix Original: related to children as well poems Suggested revision: for children, including poems Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 11. Clearer wording Original: people' mind Suggested revision: people's minds Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
- 12. Clearer wording Original: broadcast false news Suggested revision: publish false news Why it matters: This revision is more accurate, natural and precise in context.
Suggested Rewrites
- it has have impacted it has influenced
- influence of newspaper influence of newspapers
- both negative and positive aspects both positive and negative effects, but the negative influence is greater
- For instance, the information related For instance, they report information related
- develop our mind develop our minds
- a separate section for discussion or articles separate sections containing commentary and articles
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay offers relevant positive and negative examples of newspaper influence and organises them into distinct body paragraphs. However, it never clearly decides whether the influence is more positive or more negative, which is the central requirement, and language errors recur; the priority is to state and defend one comparative judgement while replacing lists of examples with fuller explanation of how newspapers shape opinions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
The task is addressed with relevant content, but key details or reasoning need fuller precision.
Develop the main features or claims with exact, verifiable support.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear overall structure, though local progression can be more precise.
Use explicit, economical sequencing and remove repetition.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the task, but several collocations or word choices are inaccurate.
Replace awkward combinations with standard academic or task-specific phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of forms is attempted, but recurring grammar errors reduce accuracy.
Proofread agreement, articles, prepositions and clause structure.