Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.
Sample Response
It is often believedconsidered by many that they can make noisenoises as much as they wishas per their wish, while other people believe that there should behave strict rules to control the amount of noise an individual makesnoise individual makes. I thinkIn my opinion, I think noise pollution causes serious social and health problemsample social and physical issues, sohence it should be controlled.
On the one hand, freedom to speak and makemaking noise is one of the human rights. In other words, every citizen has a right to make sounds or noise as they prefer. For instance, in some special events such as birthday celebrations, dancing parties making noise is accepted in the current society. Moreover, making sounds is often considered acceptable behaviourconsidered as accepted behaviour especially among small children. Making noise provides enjoyment among people obviously during joyful occasions. It helps to expressventilate one’s emotions, particularly anger and sorrow.
On the other hand, noise pollution is often regardedaccepted as one of the major concerns of the current world due to several drawbacks. Firstly, unpleasant sound causes many health problemsample health issues. For example, the high-intensity sound could cause increased stress levelslevel, deafness, cardiovascular problems and even sleep disturbances. Secondly, noise would often affect wild life. Animals would probably develop aggressive behaviour and get irritated due to the high-frequency of unpleasant sounds. To cite an example, during thunder and lightning pet animals become distressedbecame frustrated as a result of high pitch sounds. Finally, it leads to trouble communicating. More specificallyIn other sense, communication between individuals becomes difficult owing to noise from the surrounding. In other words, communication is disruptedcommunication gets distracted.
In conclusion, the noise would adversely affect society and one’s body.Hence, necessary steps to be taken to control it. In my opinion, people should abide by rulesabide rules to control noise formation for the welfare of the society and inhabitants.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay discusses both positions, states a consistent preference for controlling noise, and supports the negative case with several health, wildlife, and communication effects. Its main limitation is that parts of the opposing case and some examples are only loosely relevant, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to distinguish reasonable celebratory freedom from harmful noise and support that distinction with directly relevant examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and the writer's opinion are clearly presented with examples, although the free-speech argument and thunder example do not closely address controllable human noise.
Develop the permissive view around reasonable social celebration and contrast it directly with excessive noise that harms other people.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure creates a clear progression, but repetition of explanatory links and some abrupt sentence connections reduce fluency.
Use each example once, remove repeated phrases such as 'in other words', and link evidence directly to the paragraph's main claim.
Lexical Resource
The response has adequate vocabulary for rights, health, wildlife, and communication, but frequent unnatural collocations limit precision.
Use natural phrases such as 'make as much noise as they wish', 'release emotions', 'high-pitched noise', 'wildlife', and 'obey noise regulations'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of structures is attempted, though errors in agreement, articles, modal forms, sentence boundaries, and verb patterns recur.
Revise forms such as 'there should be strict rules', 'the amount of noise an individual makes', and 'necessary steps should be taken'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.
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