Over the past fifty years, international sports events such as the Olympic Games and World Cup competitions have played an increasingly important role in our society. However, these days, many people think such events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort. How far do you agree with the view that such sporting events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort?
Sample Response
Impacts and costs of international sporting events are quite controversial at presentin the present time. Some schools of thoughtSome of the schools are focusing on the benefits of holding international sports events while the opposing school holds the viewthe opposite school is on the view that this is a waste of time, funds and effort. This essay examines this viewpointdelves with the viewpoint before it closes the argument. Firstly, international sporting events help to build stronger relationssome special relations between hostile countriesbetween the hostile countries. For instance, the relationship between India and Pakistan is not so friendly and they have disputes on many issues. But the disputes are overlooked on the playground. When the teams participate in cricket, relations among the playersthe relationships among the players are not hostile. They are cooperative and display a friendly attitudeexercise the best friendly attitude with each other. If it continues, it is expected that the cold relations between the two countries will turn warmer someday. Moreover, such events bring foreign revenue, inspire sports loverslover to take part in outdoor games and promote a healthy lifestyle. HoweverBut on the contrary, the disadvantages are also notableacknowledgeable. When an international and exciting sports competition is arranged, people want to watch those events – some prefer to watch live at the venuewatch live in the playground while many like to watch on television sitting at home. To enjoy an intense cricket matcha high voltage cricket match or exciting Olympic events, people need to waste their valuable timetimes both day and night. A hardcore cricket fan may bunk office, school or may make late-rising early next morning for sleeping late at night. Thereby, more broadlyin a greater consideration, this is a waste of time, effort and money for the ordinary people. On top of that, hosting those events requires a huge amount of money and efforta huge sum of money and efforts. To finish the argument, I would like to say thatsay that, though arranging big events is costly, they have many advantages. They promote friendly relationshipsrelationship, entertain people, promote tourism and inspire young people to participate more in sports. This is why I disagree with the view that big sporting events are an enormous waste of fundsfund, time and effort.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response states a clear disagreement and supports it with a sustained example about sport improving relations between hostile countries, alongside relevant benefits and costs. However, the discussion becomes uneven: several benefits are merely listed, the hosting-cost point is undeveloped, and the entire argument lacks paragraph breaks. The most important improvement is to organise the response into focused paragraphs and develop each major claim with precise explanation rather than adding brief assertions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear final position is supported by relevant discussion, but development is uneven and some important claims, especially hosting costs, receive little explanation.
State the degree of disagreement in the introduction and develop the strongest benefit and drawback in comparable depth.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress from benefits to drawbacks and conclusion, but mechanical linking and the absence of paragraph breaks weaken the overall organisation.
Use separate introduction, benefit, drawback, and conclusion paragraphs, with transitions that express the precise logical relationship between ideas.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate range of topic vocabulary, but frequent unnatural collocations and word-form choices sometimes make expression awkward.
Replace phrases such as opposite school, valuable times, and make late-rising with natural, context-appropriate wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence forms, while recurring agreement, plural, article, and clause-construction errors remain noticeable without usually obscuring meaning.
Focus revision on countable nouns, subject-verb agreement, and complete verb patterns in longer sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Over the past fifty years, international sports events such as the Olympic Games and World Cup competitions have played an increasingly important role in our society. However, these days, many people think such events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort. How far do you agree with the view that such sporting events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort?
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