Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to on-campus classes. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Sample Response

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Technology has advanced rapidlysoared high and has impacted nearly every aspectevery nook and corner of our daily lives, and education is one area it has transformededucation is assuredly one of them, too. There has been an ongoing trend towards offering online classestrend of inclusion of online classes, and of late, online learning is being embraced more than everthe online medium is being inclined towards more than ever. However, I feel this trend is beneficial for human developmentgood for the sake of human development, and I will explain whyI shall be elucidating the same in the forthcoming sections.

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There are many positive effects of this trendinnumerable positive impacts of this surge, as it has reportedly helped a massive proportion of learners of all agesstudents and people of any age to learn at their own convenienceat their own convenience and ease, an opportunity that was previously less commonwhich was not commonly seen. People living in remote or rugged areasThe people living in the remote areas and the rough terrains who, owing to the geographical barriersobstructions or weather conditions, were somehow unable to study consistentlynot able to be consistent with their learning, as they often missed classes at school or collegemissed their schools/colleges, have now, with the online alternative, been helped to overcome these difficultiesrelieved of such shortcomings. Moreover, for skill developmentfor the skill enhancement too, it has become quite feasible for people to choose their preferred mentorsgo around, pick their favourite mentors around and learn at their own pace without having to undergo the difficulty of finding an institutionhumdrum of finding an institute.

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Secondly, online admissions to various coaching institutes and centres are much more affordable and convenient than in-person alternativesmuch affordable and providential as compared to the offline ones. The prime reason for this is having to pay jumbo taxes and bills in an offline setup. Then, had the e-media not been there, in the wake of the pandemic, it would have been extremely difficult to even think of with the continuity of educating people around the world, and this would have curbed the learning process devastatingly. The best part that I personally find is the luxury of going through the classes for the people who were socially or physically restrained from doing so due to various reasons like physical disabilities, gender bias, age-shaming, etc. This has indeed revolutionised the whole status of education.

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Some people though could put forth that online education may halt the learning process as it could impede the actual one on one interaction between a teacher and a student or among students, however, If the sessions are made interesting, interactive and stringent too, to a certain capacity like making everyone putting their camera on with a formal frame of conduct, such discrepancies could be ousted easily.

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In conclusion, it could be stated that online education has indeed been a boon to mankind and a gift of technology that we should revere and extract the best benefits from.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The essay maintains a clear positive position and offers several relevant benefits, especially access for remote, disabled, and otherwise excluded learners. Its main weakness is that ambitious wording and very long sentence structures frequently become unnatural or imprecise, which reduces clarity; the priority is to express fewer claims in shorter, more idiomatic sentences and keep the examples focused specifically on university courses.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

A clear position is sustained and supported with several relevant advantages plus a brief response to a disadvantage.

Next step

Keep each supporting example explicitly tied to university online courses rather than broadening the discussion to schools and coaching centres.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

The essay has a logical overall structure and clear paragraph purposes, although several overloaded sentences weaken internal progression.

Next step

Divide long chains of explanation into shorter sentences and use referencing more precisely to clarify how each point develops.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The response shows a broad vocabulary, but frequent unnatural collocations and exaggerated word choices reduce precision and naturalness.

Next step

Replace strained phrases such as soared high, providential, jumbo taxes, and revere with simpler, context-appropriate academic wording.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

There is a good range of complex structures, but recurring errors in comparison, verb patterns, punctuation, and clause control remain noticeable.

Next step

Prioritise accurate clause boundaries and verb forms, correcting patterns such as much affordable and making everyone putting their camera on.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to on-campus classes. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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