Many people prefer to read and tell stories to their children and regard it as a good opportunity to establish a stronger parent-child relationship. Others, however, think that parents do not need to do that and children should read books, watch TV and movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
The attitude of children towards societytowards the society is mainly based on the knowledge they get from books, TV and media. However, some think it is the responsibility of parents to read the stories to children, while others think children have the ability to read and understand the things on media, books by themselves. I will discuss both aspects in the followingbelow paragraphs. Firstly, parentsParents are their children's first teachersthe first teacher to their kids. Parents are the ones who haveParents are the one who will have a vast influence in moulding children to build a better futurefor the betterment of their future. Parents can convey the right messages gathered from books, television and other mediabooks, TV, media in a more precise way. Also, parents can broaden children's perspectivesview by discussing various aspects of life through storiesby discussing various elements of life by telling stories. Furthermore, parents can teach more efficient methodsteach more the efficient method of reading books and gathering information from the media. On the contrary, too much parental influencetoo much influence of parents develops a dependent attitude in children, which reduces children's confidence in making decisionsreduces the self-confidence in taking decisions. Children will also follow negative aspects of their parents because they do not get enough opportunitiesas they are not getting enough opportunity to think in different directions. Secondly, children develop a unique ability to make independent decisions and judgementsability of self-decision and judgment if they are allowed to read books, watch television and use other mediawatch TV, media. This independenceself-dependence will have a positive impact on their academic careerscarries. In addition, creativity and imagination will be moulded according to their experience and imagination. On the other hand, children will accept everything without knowing the positive and negative elements which will impact their personality and future. To sum up, I believe thatI opine that, both approaches have advantages and disadvantagesdisadvantage but parents have more influence on the development of positive attitude in children by guiding them in each element. However, parents should act in such a way that, the learning and independent decision taking abilities of their children are not compromised.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers both perspectives and reaches a qualified, relevant opinion that balances parental guidance with children’s independence. Its main weakness is presentation: the entire discussion appears as one dense paragraph, transitions are sometimes mechanical, and frequent collocation and grammar problems weaken precision. Separate the argument into purposeful paragraphs, develop each view with a specific example, and revise recurring agreement, article, and word-choice errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the writer gives a clear qualified opinion, but supporting ideas remain general and sometimes insufficiently explained.
Develop each perspective with one specific example showing how parental guidance or independent media use affects a child.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a discernible sequence, but the lack of paragraph breaks and mechanical signposting make the discussion dense and weaken progression.
Organise the response into an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion, with each paragraph centred on one clear purpose.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss development and independence, but frequent awkward collocations and inaccurate choices reduce precision.
Replace unnatural expressions such as self-decision and academic carries with standard phrases such as independent decision-making and academic careers.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts varied complex sentences, but frequent errors with agreement, articles, prepositions, and punctuation limit grammatical control.
Proofread systematically for singular-plural agreement and article use, then remove unnecessary commas that separate clauses or introductory reporting phrases.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people prefer to read and tell stories to their children and regard it as a good opportunity to establish a stronger parent-child relationship. Others, however, think that parents do not need to do that and children should read books, watch TV and movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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